Helloo! This is Carrot’s review on this masterpiece that deserves much more! I’ll start off by saying that I’m not an expert when it comes to poetry, but I really enjoyed this and thought that it would be a good use of my time, reviewing this.
No one has the guts to stand up
No one wants to stand in the leader's shoes.
No one wants to take responsibility
No one wants to make or take a decision.
No one is not afraid
This immediately catches my attention, and I think that’s brilliant. I already know I’m going to learn an important lesson here. The format is also pure perfection. I especially love poetry with formats like these, and I think you did an awesome job at rhyming the words. I already have a few questions on my mind; why? Leader of what? But the phrase “not afraid” is too sudden, so you can say no one is unafraid/brave/confident.
Everyone is trembling with fear,
Everyone is looking for someone to make the decision.
Everyone wonders what will happen to them.
Everyone wants to be done with it
Everyone wants to go home
I might be wrong here, but when you previously mentioned that no one was not afraid, and you’re mentioning them trembling with fear. I like how you repeated the reason two times to show the teams inner conflict, why they refuse to take responsibility. Instead of starting with No one, it now starts with Everyone. Why is there no one standing up?
The leader picks up the pieces
The leader puts them back together again.
The leader is also scared.
The leader makes a decision
The leader also doesn't know the outcome.
The leader, I can see, is responsible. Although they don’t know the outcome and is scared, they make a decision, because that’s what a good leader does. It shows the difference between people, and why someone who picks up the pieces and puts them back together will become the leader. You need to face challenges, to take risks, to step out of your comfort zone. I like the theme you’re telling here, and it couldn’t have been better.
No one stands with the leader
The outcome speaks for itself.
Everyone blames the leader.
The outcome is not what was expected.
The leader says:
But only one person dedicated to their work can’t succeed, at least not before many many tries. The people blame the leader but they know it’s their fault, because they won’t take responsibility, like before.
"When you had the chance to make the decision, you didn't.
Now that a decision has been made,
it's easy to put the blame on the leader.
Then you have someone to blame.
I made a decision when a decision had to be made.
I took responsibility when no one else would.”
The leader can’t change them, but they tell them the lesson. When the leader took the responsibility, the leader is responsible. But the others would not, and whoo is it to blame?
This is such an inspirational poetry, and you really (I mean really) should be proud of it! That’s all, and I wish you the best day!
-Carrot
Points: 151
Reviews: 6
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