Published August 6, 2007
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Couch works I think.
Love your avatar! Rest of the chapter coming soon.
Edit - Also... what is the name of those couches in psychologists rooms? Or simply another, *older?*, word for sofa?
Hi Reyu. Thought I should pay you a visit.
I love this description. I imagine the character walking through this glass tube at night which is connected to the mansion lol.
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You're good at describing the environments indoors.
Sofa sounds modern for this story.
The sex scene was short and lacked description. And this was supposed to be R rated.
Overall, I think this was ok. Some things could had been explained better. The character in this story could had been more developed too. I just didn't feel a connection with them.
That's all I have to say.