Cant sleep

by Reyu

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Maki-Chan
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well what can I say. You're a lot better at poetry than I am. I like this one. How you say the crickets chirping are annoying and stuff.

I enjoyed it. Well done! :D

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GingerLizzy
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I liked this, and your first verse was a capturing few lines that made me want to read the rest. I liked how you built up the agrevation that arises when you can't get to sleep, and one of them is the fact that the crickets are chirping, somewhat louder than usual.

I like how you make out the author to be longing, possibly mourning the lost sight of the moon that night and it added a mystical feel to the piece.

Good work.



It's been many years since I had such an exemplary vegetable.
— Mr Collins, Pride and Prejudice