Not all the time, you can get what you want. Teenagers might think that it’s that easy. They don’t really ponder that they have to work really hard just for them to get it. Maybe they don’t know the true meaning of WANT? According to Merriam-Webster Dictionary, want simply means to have a strong desire for – material things, feelings or someone. In some instances, teenagers would say “I want this one, and that one!” even if it’s not necessary. Teenagers want so many things in their lives but not all are material things. Some of them are after the attention they could get to others so that they would not experience the feeling of being rejected. These are some of the examples of what teenagers want. For teenagers, their needs and their wants are just the same. As compared from the past, teenagers nowadays experienced changes in their lifestyle, social life and sense of independence.
These days, teenagers are living their lives to the fullest. Their lifestyles were just extravagant. They don’t want simple things. They always want their things to be in trend, from technology, to movies to fashion. Teenagers of today want their gadgets to get left behind. “For teens in today’s world don’t like reading because they prefer to spend their free time in front of a computer.” (Drzewicka and Wojciechowska). In movies, teenagers are always searching for popular movies with great pictures and very interesting story. No one wants their money to get wasted with just non-sense and boring movies. Finding a great movie is like finding which color of clothes would best fit this day. It’s very hard to look for movies that would satisfy you as much as matching the color of your clothes. Speaking of clothes, teenagers were also prioritizing their fashion trends. They’re fashion should not be out of style or else. “The clothes they wear depend on current trends since it is important for them to follow fashion. The fact is that nowadays teens get dressed in clothes which are comfortable for them.” (Drzewicka & Wojciechowska). Teenagers were very demanding about their lifestyles that’s why they were so hard to please.
Parties, hangouts, friends, relationships and attention, these were teenager’s social life revolves. Teenagers love to party and hangout more than studying. For them, it’s very relaxing when they were partying rather than staying at home reading their lessons. It is easier to stay up late in a club dancing all night long than reviewing for tomorrow’s exam. Teenagers want their lives to be simple, no worries. They’re also partying because they want to have friends. “Having friends and "fitting in" can feel crucial to preteen children and is often their main measure of self-worth.” (Schab, 2009). Earning friends is hard to do if you’re not exposing yourself to people. Teenagers are finding the one that could ride to his/ her attitude. In connection to this, teenagers want relationships. Others want friendship but some wants serious relationship. At the end, teenagers are always seeking for attention. They will not party, hangout, find friends, commit in a relationship if they don’t want attention. Teenagers don’t want to experience the feeling of being rejected that’s why they’re always seeking for attention. “All teens lie, and that is because all people lie for selfish reasons like making ourselves look good on others. They do it to gain attention, escape punishment and impress others.” (Medoff, 2010). They do things that other people will easily notice. Sometimes, the things that they do were misunderstood by many people. It will be the reason why teenagers always seek for other people’s acceptance so that they would not feel rejected. All of these are what teenager’s social life encompasses.
“Driving fast, breaking curfews, arguing, and shoplifting; teenagers can you’re your patience. They need independence, a separate identity and testing authority.” (Davis, 2003). Teenagers want independence. “Independence for a teen partly means establishing identity and becoming in all ways a separate individual.” (Teen Independence). Today’s generation, teenagers want to express their feelings, they want to be heard and lastly they want no curfew policy. Some people generalize teenagers to be rebellious. Other people don’t know the reason behind it. Teenagers rebel because they’re looking for some freedom. Their parents don’t really understand what they want when it comes to freedom because they think that their child would do such things that may disappoint them. For short, they do not give their full trust to them. Teenagers don’t want curfews because they want to experience night life. They’re also expressing their feelings because they want others to understand them. Lastly, they want to be heard because they feel rejected when somebody ignores them. It’s really hard to accept the fact that no one really cares. They feel that everybody will agree to them that’s why they think that they’re being restrained from doing anything.
From the past until now, teenagers showed changes on their wants. For them, the meaning of wants and needs are just similar.In terms of their lifestyle, they don’t want their technologies and fashion to be out of trend. For movies, they want the movie to be interesting. Teenager’s lifestyle nowadays was extraordinary and luxurious. The social life teenagers wanted was very exciting because they party, hangout, have friends and have a relationship. They’re really trying out things through their social life. Also, teenagers were attention-seeker for some matters that they don’t want to experience the feeling of being alone. Sense of independence was what teenagers really want. Independence is very important to teenagers of today. It is there way of exploring new things without being forbidden. Teenager’s wants were very simple it’s just a matter of acknowledgement and understanding.
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I'm here to do a review on your essay. It has a lot of interesting points as to why teenagers feel the way they do, and why this is important to them. But it does shed a very negative light on teenagers. And yes, there are bad aspects to teenagers. But I think it would also be fair if you showed some of the positive sides to being a teenager as well.
In my opinion, the structure of this poem could use a bit of work. I'm going to focus on three points to help you improve this.
1. Topic sentences
The thing about an essay is, that it's often very precise. The first thing the reader wants to know is what the following paragraph will be about and then if they want to keep reading or not. To help the reader with this, the first line to every paragraph should explain what it'll be about. So, for example let's do some of yours. For the introductory paragraph it could be something like: Teenagers often find it easy to get what they want. The second paragraph already has a good topic sentence. And the third: A teenagers social life revolves around things most people find superficial, for example:... etc. I think you understand what I mean by topic sentences. If you ad these in, they can really boost your essay.
2. Stick to the point
In your essay I saw many examples to the points you were making. Really, we only need one example, and that will suffice. Also, as for the first paragraph the first line was good. You had a lot of other information in it, then the last line. If you put the first and the last lines together, you would have all the introduction you need. Nothing much else needed, although the extra information is fine. Just remember to stick to one example, and if the information is not needed to make a point, leave it out.
3. Language and diction
In my opinion an essay should be formal. And that means it shouldn't have a lot of 'justs' in it or 'like', it should be different from the way we speak. So remember to have a good tone of language.
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Hi. I must say, your essay puts things into perspective. It's very easy to forget how it was like to be a teenager, and in having my memories jogged, it's a bit silly heh. Anyway, I am The Raven and I will be reviewing your work. My review will be divided up into The Good and What Needs Improvement/Suggestions. Now, let's get down to business.
The Good:
1) I feel that it is a viable concept to base your essay on the concept of desire and teenagers. You've expounded on it quite admirably, shedding plenty of light in that dark (for some) corner.
What Needs Improvement/Suggestion:
1) The tone of your essay is not professional enough. It is too informal. There's too many use of contractions. There's a number of flawed sentence structures. Generally, language is a problem in this essay.
2) Speaking of language. Grammar. You've been shifting between past and present tense. Then there are typos like this:
There's no need to capitalise every letter in WANT, either. I spotted some punctuation problems, among others. You'll need to run your essay through another draft or two again to eliminate these errors.
I'm afraid that's all I have so far. I hope my review helps.
Good job! Thumbs up!
Be keen on some typos, some homonyms (they're and their) and the consistency of the tense of verbs. The message is well delivered though. Its a nice start so keep it up and will be anticipating for your next interesting article!
Good one. Message is well delivered.
A good essay about the the issues teenagers are facing today.
Nice one......keep on writing...
Nice one.....keep on writing...
Great ideas and thumbs up for the good citation. Practice your writing for a more coherent article. But good job!
Good job!! Try another one!
"Some people generalize teenagers to be rebellious. Other people don’t know the reason behind it." great insight with regards to teenagers' attitude on different issues. Great job
you have a writing skills! keep on writing!
"Some people generalize teenagers to be rebellious. Other people don’t know the reason behind it." great insight with regards to teenagers' attitude on different issues. great job
Nice essay
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Nice one. I like the whole essay especially the thesis statement. Keep it up