No More

Hey Bloodink, Strange here and I have a review for you on this fantastic Review Day!
My favorite part of this poem is the message it sends. Basically, you want no more. He already tore your heart up. You can't take any more. That's probably the best thing about the poem.
One iffy thing about this is the pattern. Sure, its a bit repetitive, but I'm confused on whether it's needed or not. It sure builds the strength of the message you're giving, but this seems more like a message than a poem. No matter what, it still works so great job.
Overall, great job Bloodink
Strange gives you...
9.2/10
Great job
Keep writing
Stay groovy, my friend *Hair flips*
Paint the roses red, my dear

Beautiful :')

I can feel the pain of the person. The emotions got along well and yes, you feel connected to this poem, which is incredible.
The feeling of being left out and thr pain of moving on even when your heart hums his or her name, is beautifully expressed.
The words 'No more' brings in a nice effect.

A well written poem indeed.
Please do write more of this kind.
Keep writing!

Well I would like to say I really like poem it was like you just wanted to get a point across and my favorite part of your poem was when you said

"There was a time I would have done anything for you

No more

I have bled and wept and worked for your love

No more

You don’t deserve me, I can stand

No more"

When I read that I understood how you felt.

Hey Bloodinkseesfootage,

This almost reminds me of a song........

Can't think of what it is.

"Call me your sweet, I shall listen,

No more

Dry away your tears, as they glisten

No more"

Is definetly my favorite part, by far!

Hello, there!
Rachel here to review!

I wanna start by saying that though the repetition is blatant, it's a big strength in this piece. This poem is so fiercely written. Lots of passion behind it, with no sense of "sugarcoating" things. Excellent.
I do, however, agree that there should be a rhyme scheme in this. It's distracting that some of it rhymes, but other areas don't.

Also, it was a bit hard to follow due to the lack of punctuation. Perhaps add in the necessary commas, periods, etc.?

Great job on this!
Keep writing.
-Rae

I agree with Cirute. If you were to redo this with a rhyming scheme that would rock.

It would seem you have posted 4 works at once. Good luck! I realize this may seem a little mocking, but I think repetition is your biggest strength in this poem. You don't need me to tell you where. Perhaps you could change the title, just a little more panash.
Hope this helps.
TAKE THAT YOU FIEND!

Hello, Bloodink, Cirute here to review your poem!
I would like to start by saying that I am a right bit confused by this, being that the first half doesn't rhyme, but the second half does, which is rather odd. I'm not a poet, so I don't know whether this is some particular type of poem, or whether it was a mistake. Anyway, I feel as if having the entire poem rhyme would make the piece smoother.

Moving on, I really liked the sheer rawness of this poem, very heart felt. The message was quite clear to me, which is great. The poem also has great flow and word use, which further aids the overall enjoyment in reading this. Overall, I truly enjoyed this piece.
~Cirute
P.S. Sorry for the shortness of this review, I don't have much time on my hands.