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One two, testing through
Pin me down
Spit on me
One two, testing through
Oh you do anyway...
Happy clap for me
Happy clap for me baby
One, two, testing through
You do, you do
Piss on me
Cum on me
I let you anyway
Happy clap for me
Happy clap for me, baby
One two, testing through
Too long, you're wrong
Fucks you off
Pushes you away
No more again
Happy clap for me
Happy clap for me, baby
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Loved it. The whole idea of poetry is self expression. And you expressed yo bad self all over this. Anyway, I liked how the poem seemed to carry a sense of foreboding(maybe aiding the sexual undertones?) everything seemed to be building to a pinnacle, which maintained my interest and focus throughout. The repetition is consistent pulling it all together. And it's pretty Brazen and badass which I like..
Ouch *Hadj hides under bed*
This was painful...yet also very powerful
My favorite part about this poem was how unique it is. Most people are too scared (or normal) to write anything like this. So reading it was an interesting experience and made me think of the variety that poetry is.
Anyways, nice work. Very horrifying, but well written and lyrical. I've definitely never read anything like it before
Good work and keep writing
~Hadj
Hey there! joallover here for a review on this wonderful Review Day for team Mazarine Marauders!
Well now...honestly, I don't know how I feel about this.
Some parts of this actually frighten me with the things it makes me think of.
" Piss on me
Cum on me
I let you anyway"
Things like this make me sad. What is this about? I wouldn't want to go out and read things like this. I don't think this is what poetry is supposed to be. The only feelings or themes I find are...not caring I guess. I can't think of a better way to say it at this moment.
I don't really have a whole lot to say other than that so I guess that's all.
Peace Love and Fahrvergnugen!
-joallover
"I don't think this is what poetry is supposed to be."
Poetry can be about anything.
And as for the meaning of this poem... you haven't given it one. Assign it one.
First off i agree with what blackbunny1998 had to say " Hey, you! Yeah, you! I'm here to write a review from this poem! So to start off...damn, dat poem tho...
xD Anywho, this poem isn't so bad after all. I lost somewhat a bit of my innocence, but it's not your fault. Your poem is so wrong, yet good at the same time. So keep up the good work!"
I was laughing when you cursed cuase i was not expecting that due to not many poems use strong language,
Hey, you! Yeah, you! I'm here to write a review from this poem! So to start off...damn, dat poem tho...
xD Anywho, this poem isn't so bad after all. I lost somewhat a bit of my innocence, but it's not your fault. Your poem is so wrong, yet good at the same time. So keep up the good work!
xD