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Hi HG!

First impression: I love the concept. I like how you maintain a divine being's point of view. Millions of people probably died and who knows what else Professor Perill did to the others. But seeing it through Piphael's POV, it doesn't feel like that big of a deal. We focus on the humor instead. It's not dark, it's just well executed irony — it led to some tension too.

An eye for an eye as the old book said.

I love this line. It's an interesting interpretation in the context of the story. It also paints the gods and angels of this universe as more complex beings — they have the capacity to feel vengeance and it's ironic (and funny) that they'd bring up the old book to justify that.

Its not as if they weren’t doing the exact same thing.

You missed an apostrophe.

The they here is a little too vague. I can guess you're talking about the other gods/angels. You go on to talk about how the humans also did "the exact same thing." So when in the next paragraph you write "But that hadn’t stopped them from ... the years he’d missed," the reader is forced to stop for a second and think. Some clarification would help this part flow better, I'd say.

It's nevertheless a good line. We've seen this theme before and it's always interesting how divine characters are often depicted to be hypocritical. It'd be a fair interpretation to say they represent real life officials to some extent.

But that hadn’t stop them from throwing..

"Stopped."

Brushing dust that been disturbed as he landed from his celestial robes, Piphael glanced around.

I think you meant to type "that had been disturbed." But it's still hard to visualize what's happening here (that may still just be me).

Another point. You began the story with "Piphael descended into the dark.." I wondered what he was descending from. But you later write that hadn’t stopped them from throwing him down here. Here is the keyword. Where is here? You were of course referring to the.. let's say, the chamber or labyrinth where Piphael had been banished. Here implies Piphael (the character whose POV we are following) is still in that place of banishment. That's paradoxical if Piphael has already descended from that place (as the first line implies). But I could have read that wrong — it's possible that the basement is a part of the chamber of banishment.

(If Piphael had indeed descended from the place of banishment by the start of the story) one suggestion for an easy fix may be to substitute the "here" (in "throwing him down here") with "there." If Piphael hadn't, then you could consider cutting the first sentence and pasting it — you could add some exposition to it for the sake of coherence — just before the paragraph where you describe the gloomy basement.

There were lots of lights; though mainly only glowing computer screens.

The semi-colon may be unnecessary.

The hallway was incredibly long, and no door was to be seen...
—the sounds became louder and he discovered a lone, wide doorway...

It's also paradoxical but I wonder if it was intentional. We are after all seeing it through Piphael's POV. In my opinion, this little bit establishes Piphael as a rather ignorant and sloppy god/angel, which makes sense as we read on.

“You are mistaken, agent Gunn."

Agent is a title that is followed by a name and so should be capitalized.

Clash. A small series of bangs and then another clash.

I wonder why you chose to italicize this part.

They were both firing at each other and tossing the occasional piece of furniture with the most amount of passion any two individuals had to kill one another Piphael had ever seen.

The sentence doesn't sound right to me. I think the sentence is missing a preposition and most likely before the phrase "any two individuals who had to kill one another."

I have a suggestion. They were both firing at each other and tossing the occasional piece of furniture with the most amount of passion that Piphael had ever seen in any two individuals had to kill one another.

There were screens everywhere and a of an assortment of sizes.

Something's missing here.

The games over, Professor Perill.

Missing an apostrophe. Cool name for a villain, by the way. I like this line too. Very special-agent-esque. Although I probably would've liked the dialogue to have started in a new paragraph.

From the ground, the older man had raised his head in disbelief and began to laugh at the shock that crossed his opponents face.

Disbelief, indeed. Made me feel the same thing. What are you doing, Piphael!

Two years later, he realised that maybe it was.

Did he go on hiatus (again) for two years? Come on, Piphael!

“Oh bother,” he muttered to himself, and prayed that nobody Up There had noticed his mistake.

Oh bother cracked me up. I would have objected that there's no way the gods hadn't noticed Piphael's major blooper or that two years of global chaos would've been enough to make the gods wonder that somebody did something. But good job on having established early on that the ones Up There are exactly like Piphael if not worse. At the same time, I wonder how praying works in this system. Doesn't praying (could also meaning "hoping") that nobody Up There notices his mistake only notify them that he made a mistake? Honestly, they'd probably just swipe past the notification. I don't know if that's an intended subtext but that'd be hilarious.

That's the review! Keep on writing and best of luck for review day (hope you have joined a team!).

Excelsior!

~MAS