Published February 12, 2008
I saunter past the rows and rows of romance, science-fiction, fantasy, action and humour. I pass Old John, the oldest member of the library.
His face resembles the most primogenital poetry books in the crumbliest nook of the library. Creased, worn and full of secrets-like there’s so much to know about them, and all you have to do is simply open them up and search inside. They may look dull and humdrum on the outside, but when you have opened them up, and had a good look around, you realise that there was so much more than when you first set eyes onto them.
“Hi John!” I wave, and smile.
He needs a little love in his life. Like me, the library is his second home, here you are made welcome and given warmth and care. The books are almost like long lost cousins.
“H-h-hello…Heidi! You ok Love?” he stutters, turning slowly, creaking, so that he can just get a glance of me and wave. I feel my smile broadening as I pass by. A glow seeps through me, and I have to scratch myself from it prickling all over me too many times. It’s the same sort of feeling when you are over praised, or complimented for something you really tried hard with, and made a great achievement in. If only everyone in the world were like the library clan…
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This is a carry on.
Hiya! I like this, but I am still unsure where this is going, I hope you wll prove me wrong later on - keep writing! Although, please keep the review:post 2:1 please!
Hello, welcome to YWS! First, before you post any of your work, you are required to critique at least two stories. It's in the rules. Second, this is way too short to be a story. It's a great beginning, but it's more like something I'd read on the back of a book. Maybe you could elaborate more on John and your main character. And what's the library clan? And yes, it would be nice to put spaces in between your paragraphs. It's much easier to read.
PM me if you have any questions,
Nariel
Hi,
Please space before you post. It makes it hard for th other readers to read. Please space then I will crit and read
-lg*
pm me if you want help!
Pleas space between paragraphs. Then I will crit.
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