Your Love's Knife

Well, I like this song and I can really relate to just about everything in the song. The chorus was okay to me and I don't think you should change anything with the chorus. I did kind of have a problem with the word "pill" being used in it because it reminds me of that Pink song...but that's not a huge problem and I'm probably the only person who didn't like that word being used. Other than that it is great.

That's definitely my plan, unsocialbutterfly!

I'm not exactly a song writer and I'm not good at review poems or songs but I think this is really great. I really like this and it seems like your collaboration worked. You should like record it and put it on here, when you're absolutely finished of course.

Wow, this is awesome!! I love the second verse and the bridge because it really brings out the song's meaning and what you are trying to get across. A lot of people would be able to relate to this song. Good job on writing it!!!!!!! Keep on writing!!!!

Hey

I quite liked it and it sounds like it could be a really good song

However;

In the chorus where it says "spell" It makes it seem really cliché and overused and done, and the work loses originality. I would suggest changing that line. Of course, that's just personal opinion.
the other would be, could it seem more begging? Like, "Please don't turn your back" it just adds more depth to the m.c. of it all? This is just my view however.

If you have any questions or would like a more in depth review let me know and i will help.

~Retro Disco666