Published February 13, 2011
You left me here, yet you took nothing.
Why couldn’t you just take everything?
Can’t you see that you’ve left me with something?
The pain I feel without you.
You left me here, yet I’m unsure if you even care.
Why couldn't you just present the truth to me?
Can’t you see that you’ve left me in question?
My mind cries out to be set free;
Suffocating from the words
You should have said to me.
You left me here, yet I still looked out the window.
Why couldn’t you just meet my gaze?
Can’t you see that I saw hope out somewhere in the dark?
My love for you now is but a haze.
You left me here...
So now I’m leaving you.
2009 Vincent Cuccolo
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Thanks, neonspeeddemon! I actually NEVER thought that this piece would get published, as it is a very personal piece of mine! But hey, life is unexpected, right?
Nice! I like it! =) I get why it's been published. I don't think I've got any complaints which is rare.
Thank you, kjr5horses and telle_04! To answer your questions: I have indeed considered song writing, however, I haven't written anything concrete as of yet!
Fantastic! i am not easy to please when it comes to poetry and this was just amazing!
Keep Rhyming! And have you considered song writing?
vincent?
you have the emotion, you have good verses. keep writing.
i'm used to writing lyrics and stuff like that, and i think your poem has a potential for a song. have you tried writing a song? just asking.
PM me for anything.
-telle.
Why, thank you kindly!
Wow this was really good. I could actually feel what the narrator of the poem was feeling and that's kinda hard to do with a poem as short as this. Somehow, though, you did it, and I am glad that somebody knows how to do it. All in all, I loved this.
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