Published April 22, 2011
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Overall I liked it, but I have a suggestion for one line. The line where you say " I wouldn't go" try replacing it with something like "I'd never go", just a thought. The questions you posed were very sweet and relatable, and that's always good. Good job.
I love this poem it is soo cute!!! I think it shows a lot of emotion and how you feel.
Nice poem. It flows nicely and it just sounds great. There were only two parts I thought could be edited:
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They didn't really go with the style because every other stanza was two lines while those were only one. I also thought the first one kind of took away from the flow of the poem, while the second one was the perfect ending. It just didn't seem to fit in that particular place to me.
I love the poem though! I hope to read more from you!
Hey! I liked this piece a lot. The questions were sweet. I find one little part hard to understand though...
Other then that I loved it! Keep it up
-Jessa