Published May 22, 2011
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Thank you very much, tydecker777! I am happy to hear that you enjoy my work!
It very much warms my heart!
Gah, I do love reading your work =] There's always so much going on, so much to interpret and feel. This poem in particular has a lot of emotion. I sort of had this little scene in my head playing all the while, which sort of matched what you were saying. But any who, overall a descent, solid poem. Beneath the Surface... there are so many instances that people can relate to with this. Splendid work =]
Thank you very much, Sassykat! I appreciate your feedback, and perhaps I shall reconsider the night/alright rhyme again!
I liked this, it was awesome. It had meaning to it. I think the rhyme in the first stanza (night/alright) was slightly forced, or even cliche, but other than that it flowed nicely and made sense. Positively sensational job!!