Published September 14, 2006
Killing emotion
That human condition
Dragging our consciousness into the dust
While logic and reason
The clearminded decision
Are cast by the wayside to molder and rust
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ooooooo, very nice!
Surprisingly deep for a poem inspired by a t.v. show...
I like this alot. It's short yet very effective, it flows well and the rhyme is brilliant. You could expand on it, but not if it feels complete to you... If you try to expand on a poem simply to make it longer, it usually sound forced...
Kudos on this, welcome to YWS!!