Published September 19, 2006
Blood and ink
Runs through my veins
Fueling my deepest fantasies
Driving my darkest dreams
I breathe parchment and pen
Words are my bread and wine
For all I am, and ever will be,
Is blood and ink
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Not lengthy enough... I mean, honestly, it's not something you should change, but I've read a ton of poems and somehow the word "blood and ink" are getting cliche... but this was still an OK poem.
I liked the subject of the poem, but your word choices didn;t exactly ryme. Keep the subject and tweek the words.
I agree with Wiggy, but I really do love the poem. It kinda reminds me of my Wordmaker, but more...poetic, deffinately. Very cool start!
I challenge you to add more feeling to this. It's a nice start, but it's cliche. Add a twist to it that will make people feel the power of your words, that will make people relate with you. I believe that you can do a lot of great things with this poem. I'd try expanding it a little too. It's almost like an outline for a great poem. Great job, and keep writing!
Wiggy