Young Writers Society

Hi/ Namaste
This poem is really sweet.
From the beginning, it was hard for me to understand, but later from the mid, it felt really amazing.
The thing you mentioned is really true. Love is a feeling we want to enjoy as much as we can, even when we know that the end is not happy.

But their are some lines where I didn't get to understand.
Like,
Clearly it was mutual by the way she rubbed against his legs.
And the meow you added in the end.
If I conclude these both things than I don't know if I'm correct, but somewhere it feel that the female part of this poem is a cat.
And if it's not than just ignore me, and consider it as my understanding of your poem.
Still I really loved your thoughts.

Hi, PeculiarGypsy! I'm Lee, and here to review your AHAHAHAWESOME poem. Seriously, at the end I began laughing so hard my stomach cramped. I was thinking, "It seems like a typical love poem," and then... Oh, wow. You really got me there. Like I said, it's a great poem. But allow me to nitpick just a little. I'll also keep praising you every few seconds, so be warned.

Even science knew of its healing capacity.

to love so deeply, it left him with too much vulnerability

What would he do if she was gone after all? With no trace of return?

but that's the price of loving her

Love ultimately ends in pain doesn't it?

To him it didn't matter how much time was left, or even what she was

It especially didn't matter, what everyone said he needed to be.

And never failed to welcome him with an endearing..

meow

Okay, so when I started this poem, I was not expecting it to end where it did, but I am so, so happy for that lovely and adorable twist. Nothing's wrong with love poems, because love and longing and romance and relationships are totally a part of being human and I get why they exist, but this was just so refreshing I absolutely had to leave a RAVING REVIEW!!!!!!

I love poems like this, where the end makes you want to re-read it in light of what you know at the end. I read everything in a different light and I love that so much! This is such a cute pet poem, and I love the subtle hints of cat-ness that you leave throughout the poem.

Not an angel's voice, but it might as well be, her smoothness was his remedy.

(What a weirdo, is he really so attached to that thing?)

Clearly it was mutual.. by the way she rubbed against his leg.
And never failed to welcome him with an endearing..
meow

Some would say to love so deeply, it left him with too much vulnerability.

Through her he could have his vulnerability
and learn that it was never a bad thing.

Hey Gypsy! I accidentally read the "meow" when I opened the poem and I instantly fell in love with it. I have to say, I really love cats and dogs. They're the best things on the planet.

I like how you've used a kind of style of placement of stanzas to switch perspectives from this boy to his cat. It's pretty neat. There was just one line where the perspective - I'd say - was, both their perspectives? Right here;

So he ignored all of the critics, and adored her anyways.

Clearly it was mutual.. by the way she rubbed against his leg.