Published July 27, 2010
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This is a very nice poem--sharp and short.
The only thing that frustrated me was the sense of disappointment once it was over. I would love to see you expand on this, and make it a little less conceptually tentative. By lengthening it, I think you could improve the overall quality in addition to drawing us in a little farther.
Good work!
Hey, this was well written. I do kinda agree with the comment above, it is a tad hard to read with the words being in white and all. But This was still a nice little poem. It is very sweet. So keep up the good work, and I hope to read more of your work =)
this is adorable!! really i loved it.
but i must say it's was hard to read in the white. i understand that it's the 'pure angel' effect but i had to tilt the screen on my comp to read it properly.
but my be that's just me and i need glasses i don't know
can't wait for your next one!!
Really good I must say, simple but strong. It doesn't mater how long or short it is, simple or strong, what maters is what it means and how it is deliverd. You have delieverd a well written poem my good Sir. So keep on writting and I really hope to read more of your soon enough
I love this! It's so beautiful! Might I say that I've read some of your other poems, and I realize you are very talented. Keep on writing them, because I do enjoy reading your work. If you have anything else you want me to review, just PM me the link, and I'll check it out! Thank you!
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