You have such a beautiful idea here. I haven't seen anything from a mother's point of view on this site yet which is unfortunate because it is such an important and emotional perspective. I love all of the ideas and images you create with this poem.
While your ideas are wonderful, the words do not flow very elegantly. Maybe using stanzas would help, but I'm not sure. Maybe some rhyming?
I really love this poem, thanks for sharing it.
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