Young Writers Society

This is the entire first chapter of the book I'm writing on Wattpad. I have a clear idea of what my charcter(Mina Lee) should be like, but I'm having trouble conveying that to my future readers.

Mina is extremely talented, and tries to come off as a nice person. In reality, she's a sarcastic and defiant young adult who is still trying to cope with the departure of her older brother Damien(who is a well-known hollywood actor), and her crumbling relationship with her mother.

Mina sees becoming an idol as a way to fix her problems, and will stop at nothing to accomplish her mission. It seems like I'm having trouble with getting Mina to stop and think. Stopping and thinking contributes to both the plot and character development...but I can't find anywhere to put it!! Please give me advice!! Thank you in advance!!

p.s. Let me know if you need help understanding the romanized Korean words!! 

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I gasped at the site of the SM Trainee Building. This building represents my dreams...this building is going to make them reality, I thought.

After so many years of lessons and countless hours of practice, it was finally happening.I shook off the trainee-high and typed in the passcode to the entrance. The tinted glass doors slid open to reveal a security guard. He asked me for my Trainee ID. I proudly showed it to him and bowed.

"Have a nice day," I said sweetly. His tough facial expression softened as he smiled in reply. Manners always make the difference, I thought as I walked toward the receptionist.

"Annyeonghaseyo! I am Mina and I'm here as a trainee," I took a look at the person in front of me. She wore a black pencil skirt and a white button-up blouse, with a Staff ID saying 'Park Baek Hee' around her neck.

"Ah, you must be new! SM Globals just ended last year, right?" Baek Hee asked. I nodded and smiled. "We get a lot of new faces at SM around this time. " She stated happily.

"Do you know where this room is?" I pulled my schedule from my duffel bag and pointed to the first rectangle. It had a room number next to the name of my class.

"Go down that hallway," Baek Hee pointed to the left."take the first right and your practice room will be the third door on the left. Make sure you're on time," she flashed a quick smile and went back to work.

"Thank you, have a nice day!" I told Baek Hee.

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I repeated the receptionist's instructions in my head as I jogged down the correct hallway. The walls were painted a pink that was supposed to go well with the white ceiling. I understand that it's SM's color, but a hallway that bore so much resemblance to PeptoBismol was tacky, even for a trainee building.

Before I could think about the interior of the hallway, I felt my phone vibrate in my back pocket. I rolled my eyes and looked at the sender. A 'KathrineXXX' stood in the middle of my screen. Kathrine has known me since birth. She was always there for me, and if it wasn't for her, I wouldn't have been accepted into SM. She was the one who pushed me to audition anyway.

Kathrine:Matt told me the news!

Me: ????

Kathrine: You're a trainee for SM!!!!!!!!!!

I grinned at my phone and tucked it into my duffel bag, turning my attention to getting to class.

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Before I knew it, I reached the designated meeting place. I could already tell it was a dance studio, which was expected of SM. They were known for their dancing-machine idols. You really couldn't be involved in the cutthroat world of K-Pop without a good performance.

I opened the glass door, revealing a very large room with mirrors on two of its four walls. Inside the practice room was a man who was wearing a staff ID that said 'Seo Sang-Gyu' and 'Dance Instructor' in bold letters.

"Annyeonghaseyo sunsaeng-nim," I said as I bowed ninety degrees. He nodded slightly and smiled.

"New trainee?" Seo-sunsaeng asked.

"Yes, this is my first time here," I answered. He nodded in understanding as he walked towards the corner, where a large stereo was located. A few seconds later, EXO's "Wolf" was blasting throughout the room. I furrowed my eyebrows in confusion as Seo-sunsaeng leaned against the wall closest to himself.

After a couple seconds of praying to be spared from any future punishments, I decided to take action. My body moved to beat, putting a spin on as many moves as possible. Of course it was still EXO's choreography, but if you put me next to them, I promise you that it would look completely different from the way I moved. I danced until the song stopped playing and froze, holding the final position as Seo-sunsaeng made his way over to me.

"Okay," He began, sighing heavily."Now I know what you need to work on."

"What do you mean?" I asked. Seo-sunsaeng rolled his eyes.

"Don't change the choreography! If you want to be successful, then synchronization is a must," He explained. It's always the ones who are nice at first...

"I still don't get it," I said. Seo-sunsaeng screamed in frustration, grabbing his hair and stomping his feet.

"You're trying to make the choreography unique to yourself. You're not supposed to do that," He said in annoyance.

"But if I'm not unique, then how will I stand out?" I inquired, straightening up and placing my hands on my hips. Seo-sunsaeng's facial expression went from annoyed to angry. I raised my eyebrows, daring him to say or do anything else. Obedience was never my strong point, but that defiant attitude is what got me accepted into SM. It wasn't my vocals, nor my dance skills, but my electric demeanor.

So there I was, challenging my own teacher on my first day meeting him. Seo-sunsaeng moved closer to me, to the point that our chests were almost touching. I didn't back down.

"Listen," he began."I have no idea why this company picked a third-rate person like you, but first-rate people like me don't have time to accommodate those who choose to drag everyone down. If you want to be one of those people, then you're in the wrong place," Seo-sunsaeng's face hardened as he stepped away and pointed at the studio's door. I know it sounds cliche, but something inside of me clicked. K-pop was I wanted to do, but I would have to betray every cell in my body to succeed.

However, that's what made it even more appealing.

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