Young Writers Society

HELLO OLIVIA WELCOME TO YWS

first of let me say thank you for sharing this work with us. if ever there was a wholesome and warm-hearted poem in the midst of all of the other works here, this would be it. from my takeaway, your goal was to show us your love and admiration (whether this is from your perspective or not, i'm not sure)for your gecko friend, and i think that's adorable.

the rhyme scheme you give us is very simple, and very well done. i can find myself easily moving between the lines and enjoying the subtle pattern you have going on between everything. the descriptions you give us about your gecko friend are also cute, even when you talk about them attacking LOL.

as far as the message goes, this is something you read to feel good about. there is clear point you are trying to get across and a very obvious connection between the narrator and their subject. believe me when i say that connection is presented well. as this poem is so light-hearted, i can not find any ways for you to improve it through critiquing it. all i can say is that you've done a good job and it made me feel good reading it, and sometimes, that is all someone need.

thank you again for sharing your work and i hope to read more from you in the future! see you around!

Hi Olivia,

you have written a lovely poem, I like the easy-going and optimistic way. It makes it fun to read and you can just smile when you finish reading it.

The rhymes are great yet simple. They are easy to understand and remind me of one of those nursery rhymes I used to sing along to at school. The subject is also well-chosen as you write about your pet gecko.

Perhaps it is this simplicity that gives the poem a certain loveliness! It doesn't have to be extravagant and complex sometimes.

Mailice.

Hey Olivia! I'm Yoshi and I'm here for your review! Welcome to YWS!

First off, this poem has a good theme-- your gecko. Your word choice is very simple, if not repetitive.

Your rhyming is very good, but very repetitive, like said before. Since your word choice is simple, you need to find a way to connect the lines in a unique way. However, I did not see anything out of the ordinary with the word choice in this poem.

This poem was cute, I'll give you that. "You crouch and then attack!" was probably the cutest line. The way you described it sort of gave the gecko a bit of a narrative. Good job!

Anyways, let's get started.

Gecko, gecko on the log

I wonder what you’re thinking of?

Up so high in the sky,

It almost seems like you can fly!

You are such a sleepy boy,

You really do look like a toy.

You can truly jump so far

I think you are very bizarre.

Do you actually have a pet gecko?

Aww. I love the way you kind of wrote a little bit from the gecko’s POV with how big you made everything sound. The gecko is in an enclosure right? Anyways, overall a really cute poem. It is very much from the heart and also kind of shows our loneliness in quarantine. The only things I can see to change are a couple lines where it felt like there were too many syllables. For example, “I think you are very bizarre.” Seems to have one too many syllables. Nice poem and welcome too YWS.

Hello! First of all, welcome to YWS! I hope you have a great time here. I am Hannah. I haven't wrote a review in a long time, so it might be a little shaky but I will try.
Grows:
This was a great poem, and you did really good on the writing but the second line that was supposed to rhyme with the first didn't really, and the rhythm was a bit off.
Glows:
This was a really cute poem! Great for the first one, especially since you just joined Young Writers Society! I really loved this specific line,
"You love playing in the sun,

You have a very cute run."
Your gecko sounds so fun! Also, I feel like this poem very well conveys what it is like to have a pet that is so important to you. That especially showed in the last lines,

"I love you from the bottom of my heart

I promise we will never be apart!

You are my tiny scaly friend

And I’ll defend you till the end!"


Also, your rhyming was really clever! Great job for your first one. I hope you keep writing, have a great day, and that you have a great Valentines day!


Hannah