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Oblivion

by OblivionShadow


This is like Oblivion because nobody knows you
This is like an orphanage no real home to go to
Its like Antarctica, its harsh and its cold too
Like paper in art class there's people trying to fold you
Lifeless, staring down the barrel of a gun
Because i don't see the point like staring at the sun
Life is like a normal class its not very fun
Thinking celibacy like a monk or a nun
People think its all adventures but its far from Tom Sawyer
People back stab and lie to you like lawyers
Hypocrites making promises they can't keep
Feel like Tyrese but beyond Waist Deep
Yin or Yang which has more ground
Sanity on milk cartons because it can't be found
Eventually I'll fade back, dead inside a car trunk
And all will forget like the last time they were drunk


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Tue Apr 01, 2008 10:28 am
Lil_Pau says...



Hey, this is well done! The rhymes were very fun and that made it a good read. Keep it up! :D




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Tue Apr 01, 2008 12:40 am
myfreindsavamp says...



Great but you know if you add in to the day with out bursts of funny but randum crap it's more fun for others and posible you to....*just a thought...*
-em




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Mon Mar 31, 2008 4:36 pm
blacktiger3915 says...



I liked this shadow. I can really relate to it. Nicely done!! I can't wait to hear more of poems like this. Anyway, see you at lunch and good luck! :D





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