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The Quiet Ones (A short horror story)

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They didn’t scream when they took her.

No forced entry. No shattered glass. Just the soft click of the front door opening — a sound she knew too well. Her husband used to make it every night when he came home. Except he’s been dead for seven months.

She was in the bathroom, brushing her teeth, when she felt it — the shift in air. The kind of stillness that doesn’t belong. Like the house had stopped breathing.

Then, the whisper.

"We’re here for the quiet ones."

Not loud. Not close. But inside her head, like a thought that wasn’t hers.

She dropped the toothbrush, turned off the light, and crept down the hall. The bedroom door was open. The bed — made. Her daughter’s stuffed rabbit on the pillow. But no Emma.

Just the baby monitor, glowing green.

And a voice — not static, not a cry — but a low, wet gurgle, like a throat full of blood trying to speak.

She snatched the monitor, pressed it to her ear.

"Mommy… they’re wearing our faces."

Then silence.

She ran to the closet, pulled out the shotgun — loaded, just like he taught her. She didn’t believe in ghosts. She believed in bullets.

She stormed through the house. Kitchen. Living room. Basement. Nothing.

Then she saw it.

On the back porch.

Three figures.

Standing in the rain.

All wearing pajamas.

All the same height.

All facing the woods.

And all with Emma’s hair.

One turned.

Smiled.

It had her daughter’s eyes.

But the mouth… too wide. Teeth like needles. Jaw unhinged like a snake’s.

It didn’t speak.

It vomited.

Not blood. Not bile.

A voice.

Her husband’s voice.

"You should’ve stayed in the bathroom, baby. They don’t like witnesses."

She raised the gun.

The thing tilted its head.

Then, from behind her — a giggle.

She turned.

Emma stood there, in the hallway.

Smiling.

But her neck… twisted. Broken.

And behind her, something wearing her face, grinning with too many teeth, whispering:

"We don’t take the loud ones. We take the quiet ones. Because they don’t fight. They don’t scream. They just… go away."

The gun fell.

The house went dark.

And the last thing she heard — three little girls, giggling in the woods. 

Not one of them real.

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Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the shocking S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - The main character, a mother, has been told by her husband to watch out for the monsters that take “the quiet ones”. She does, but she is not quick enough, for they have taken Emma and now, they are all wearing Emma’s face. She is too late.

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - This story is throughly horrifying, so I have no recommendations to make as of right now. Except maybe Emma’s age could be put in, because I assume that she is two years old but I don’t know. That part isn’t really that important though.

Chocolate Bar - There is a theme in this story of things not truly belonging to someone and yet still being there. It’s present when the main character can hear a voice in her head that isn’t hers and when she sees the beings all wearing Emma’s face. It feels very uncanny valley and I like that! I also like how they talk about taking the “quiet ones”. I see that as a metaphor for real life bad people targeting those who are “quiet”, those who do not do much, those who will supposedly not be missed, because they’re all the easier for them to take.

Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a chilling story! I liked reading this and if you ever post more, especially horror, then I will be certain to read! Now, before I leave off with new nightmares thanks to you, I…

Wish you a spectacular day/night! ^v^

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bladassare
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hello, baldassare here for another review!

so I read this last yesterday, but just remembered to write a review for it, and WOW was this creepy late at night. good job, you sure scared me :)

one thing I'm not quite understanding is what the monsters are. do they steal the identity of the people they kill, or do they posess them? or both? I didn't understand why the monster with Emma's face was speaking in her husband's voice, but as her husband.

overall, I really liked this! short, scary, and got straight to the point. great job!

have a great day!

One of the details was that you didn't know what the monsters are :P but thank you!

One of the details was that you didn't know what the monsters are :P but thank you!



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