Hi! My name is PenPacifist, and I will be reviewing your monologue today.
This monologue was fantastic. My favorite types of artistic works are the gritty ones; the ones that are stripped down and don't have any sugar coating. They need to be raw, and this piece of writing is definitely raw. I was very impressed with the content of the writing. It kept me on my toes, and it had excellent visuals. The ending was attention grabbing, and the ending was satisfying, but also a cliffhanger. That statement was quite the paradox, but there is just no other way to describe it.
I have a few minor critiques. The first one: what is this "Quite Button" you are talking about? Is it a typo? Did you mean Quit, or did you mean to type Quiet? However, if you did mean to type the word quite, what does the word quite mean in this setting?
There are your occasional grammatical errors here and there. I would suggest looking at the work one more time for quick revisions and touch ups. There isn't anything too major or unforgivable. I think typos can be marks of a good writer, though, because it shows you were busy and committed to the process of writing your piece. But still, if it is fixable, fix it.
I have one more question. Why is it that some words are emphasized with capitalization? Are they more important? Are they themes?
Overall, this is a very good piece of writing. This character seems like they would be an interesting addition to any type of story. I encourage you to keep writing, and to please keep us posted if you are working on a story!!
Points: 288
Reviews: 18
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