Chapter 1
One minute I’m walking home from school, the next I’m being arrested for something I didn’t do. What a crazy world we live in. I’m charged for stealing top secret files from the FBI when I don’t even know where the facility is. My sentence is three years in prison and community service. Once I get out I’m going to track down the person who did this and make them pay, but it wouldn’t be any good if I’m not patient. I’m going to have to think of a plan.” Hey, lunch time”, said the guard. I will also have to get some friends to help me. Which might be hard, but it probably won’t be if they want out to. “Come on, I don’t have all day.” Said the guard. I guess I’m not the only one who’s not patient. I start walking to the cafeteria with the guard behind me. I don’t know why he has to follow me. There’s no where to run… yet. We walked by the warden’s office just like we did every day for the past week, except this time there was a different voice. I stopped to listen and the guard bumped into me. “Get moving “he said then shoved me. When he did that, I turned around and pushed him as hard as I could, then I ran. I got outside then looked around for an opening. Just my luck, there was a delivery truck and an open gate. “Stop her!” said the guards behind me. The guards a head of me started running towards and they tried to catch me, but I was to fast. I was almost to the gate. Then I saw the gate getting smaller. They were shutting the gate. This is all happening so fast. I don’t even know if I’ll make it, but I do at the last minute. Right before they shut the gate. I keep running though. Trying to get as far away as I can, but one more problem. I’m at the Alcatraz prison. I am surrounded by water. I can’t stop, not while I’m so close to freedom. So when I reach the cliff, I jump into the freezing ocean. When I popped out of the water, I take a look around. I made it. Finally, I’m free, but wanted. I start swimming to the shore of San Francisco. Its a couple miles away, but I’ll make it. I know I will.
I was right I did make it. I thought the sharks would get me first. Its dark out, I’m exhausted. I need to find a place to sleep for the night. I get up and start walking. There should be an old abandon building on this street. I had seen it in the newspaper. I looked around down the street and I don’t see it any where. “Hey, looking something?” I turned around and it was my best friend, James. “What are you doing here?” I asked excitedly. “Family vacation, remember. I thought you in jail.” He said. That made my smile go away. “I was.” I said, sadly. “Do you need a place to sleep? If you want, you come to my place.” He said. “I would, but I don’t want the police to come after you too.” I said. “They won’t come after me. They might question me, but they won’t arrest me.” He said. I thought about it for a minute. “Alright, but I’m leaving in the mourning.” I said then looked him straight in the eye. Something was wrong. “Your lying.” I said. “What? Wait I’m –.” I didn’t let him finish. I just turned away and ran. Crying I as go. Trying to look for the empty building. I hear footsteps. Is he following me? “Get away from me!” I shouted. It was the only thing I could think of then running. Then I heard a static noise and some info on a criminal. I was right he was a cop. I took a left turn into an alley. Then I heard a gun shot. He was trying to shoot me. I kept running, gun shots as loud as I ever heard them. I ran past this dumpster and I think he shot me, but I can’t really tell. After that someone grabbed me. I think it was the cop, I don’t really know. Everything turned black after that.
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okay I fix some of the errors and this is a story. not all of them are accurate thanks.
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HI! Here to review Birdy!
1) Steeling should be stealing
2) If this is Alcatraz why is there a truck?? Maybe a boat?
3) Alcatraz has no gate that I'm aware of hmm... We should look it up in media class.
4) "I thought you in jail" It should be I thought you were in jail.
BYE!! See'ya tomarrow!
Mari