Published August 24, 2011
Dedicated to my closest friend in all the world.
Let me know what you think 
On the day the world falls,
And the sky turns red,
And the ground rumbles and crumbles away.
I will run to you,
I will hold your hand,
And I will beg for you to stay.
When the rivers stop flowing,
And the grass stops growing,
And the earth comes close to death.
There'll be no crying,
I won't tremble or shake,
Because you're there in my final breath.
When the buildings fall,
When the roads break up,
And all the power leaves my street.
We will smile,
We will close our eyes,
Knowing in the next world, we will meet.
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Aoow, this is soo Sweet! Bit choppy structure, but part from that this was quite amazing! I really liked it! I like how the title hints something tragic and horrid but that reading it wasn't depressing but just... well, it's a very sweet poem and it made me smile xD
Good Luck & Keep Writing
// Demoness
hey, this is great:D it really rolls of.. (i would say tongue, but im not reading it aloud and i dont want you to think that) so yeah! it has the potential to be all gloomy but you've made it joyful and happy and all about the friendship, and i simply think you're amazing:) just saying..
i hope someone comes along and can give you a proper review, cuz not that im wrong in it being awesome, but its always good to get something helpful from a review. and the only thing you can get from mine (and the others) is that your a great writer, in fact better than us cuz we cant say bad stuff about it. I've noticed that, that the really good writers will find the errors and the bad ones will just be in your awe:)
anyways, im in awe of you;)
HAVE A GOOD DAY!:P
I love this poem. I can definitely tell that you've written it to a close friend, to someone of importance in your life. True friends are so important. They're there for you when you're hurting, they make you smile when you don't really feel like smiling, and they're just all around amazing. This poem really represents how important friends can be, because, if your best friend really was there with you at the end of the world, it would be infinitely better than being all alone.
Keep writing!!!
will hold your hand,
And I will beg for you to stay.
THAT was my fave part you did great