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The poem is well written and it seems to have a few different deeper meanings that can be applied to many different situations. Allows the reader to apply the poem to their own life in multiple ways giving it much more meaning to it.

I love the imagery you used. It gives a clear picture of what you are writing about.

It is a really good poem. )

Eyy incoming review and this is different than some of your other poems. It has a much more melancholy tone to it. Some of your poems are depressing but this one gives a sadness the reader can experience with a notable cause. The causes of sadness are also general enough that your reader can identify with you but the way you write makes it seem like you really miss your time doing these things with friends if you did at all. I don't know everything in your personal life. the only complaint I have that's noteworthy of maybe having a correction is in your first stanza. It was a little bit choppy in my opinion. And I'm also not so keen on rhyming Stars with wars. That's just my opinion. But overall this reminds me of the last pages of The Outsiders when Ponyboy was remembering Bob, Johnny, and Dally after trying not to remember them. He didn't want to remember them for fear of feeling pain of their loss. But then he remembers those kids and this time, not feeling the pain of the loss. But the difference between you and Pony is that its still hurts for you to remember. Maybe one day the pain of memory will become the joy of reliving. Great Poem Honey! Keep it up and I mean it. okay byeeeeee! <3

Very nice!

Hi NastyMajesty! Anne here for a review.

First of all, this is a very relatable poem during these times and the feelings are expressed in a awesome manner. Let's get to the details now

Remember when…
We used to gaze at the stars,
when we didn’t have to worry
about all these wars?

Remember?
We used to climb the tallest of trees…
We were so free

Now it’s all crumbled away like sand

Now we’ve aged too much
Too fast.

Remember?
Seems like just yesterday
we were having the time of our lives.
Now we can’t even have dry eyes.

It hurts to remember when

Nice!

WOOOO I'm here! Wow! This is a very good poem! So, hi NastyMajesty; I'm here for your review!

First - Love the rhymes. Perfect, perfect, perfect. Although if there was a specific meter or rhythm, it would have been nicer.

I won't delve into the technical stuff like rhyming, meter, rhythm, punctuation, etc. but I do want to say this: There are some places where you put punctuation in correct places, but there are other places where you didn't. This is a common mistake and is usually hard to notice, so I have no big problem with it. But obviously, it's better to be consistent.

Now, to the actual plot of the poem--

Wow. Wow. Wow. This is certainly a very dramatic poem. It doesn't have the power of an epic poem, but it has its own special twinge to it. This poem seems to punch the reader in the gut with emotions, and describe many different things with abstract metaphors.

Remember when…
We used to gaze at the stars,
when we didn’t have to worry
about all these wars?

Remember?
We used to climb the tallest of trees…
We were so free

Can you remember
when we would walk together
hand in hand?
Now it’s all crumbled away like sand

It hurts to remember when
I just hope
that we’ll be able to do it all again

tannk u for reading <3