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Drinking Buddies

by Morrigan

the smoke above you lingers in the eaves,
mocking you, eddying into the same face you wore
when you screamed about your dead sister,
your whisky breath rotten as i ferried you away
from sleek bars and silent sidewalk stars.

somehow your scent stays unsullied--
a sweet breeze lifts a stray hair from your face
(you never let the curls free but you won't cut them),
and your cigarette glows. the stubborn odor
can't compare to your bullheadedness.

somehow a year has passed since a millionare
barbed you into a dark blue confession;
for the first time you spilled yourself
into the cracks between concrete
like rivers, and you let me feel the flow.

you're all dammed up now. the ghostly face
that rises above you meets stoic flesh and dissipates.
it will return with the next flick of your lighter,
along with the inevitable overflow
(you never let them free but you won't cut them).

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Tue May 14, 2019 1:40 pm
Allie123 says...

it is very deep

Morrigan says...

Thanks, Allie, I am glad you enjoyed reading it!

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Tue May 14, 2019 5:36 am
seekingthetruth says...

shoukd bea capital letter at the start of Somehow

Morrigan says...

I%u2019m not sure if you noticed, but I don%u2019t use any capital letters in the entire piece. It%u2019s a stylistic choice! Keep that in mind next time you%u2019re reviewing something with no capital letters in it! :)

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Mon May 13, 2019 7:32 pm
seekingthetruth wrote a review...

this is a real masterpiece it has everything a poem should have it has a nice structurer a great plot and a very good title. the tone is very consistent through out some minor spelling mistakes but that as you know can be easily fixed with a touch of the keyboard. your rhyme scheme was consistent but could of done with it being more consistent. overall it ewas a very great poem to read I hope I will here more from your work in the late fututer.



Morrigan says...

Hi truth,
Would you mind pointing out the spelling mistakes for me? I%u2019m having trouble finding any. Thank you for your feedback!

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