Let's just start off with the nitpicks. ^^
Suddenly everything change (changes).
Or sale her body (sell)
I kind of like it. The theme of it is a very teenager contemporary one, I guess. Having to deal with popularity then waking up to the huge change when it ends. Or with the mirage of perfection around said person, but life always catches up.
Unfortunately you just weren't able to get the feelings through to me. Probably because of the difference of lenght of the verses. Long small long small, this difference makes it hard to get any fluence and therefore passing the feelings.
But don't stop. Keep on going. Near-perfection comes with time and effort.
Rob out.
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