Young Writers Society

Hey Moraca101! I'm here to do a review! I liked the poem - here's a few notes.

you are so crazy

Based upon reading the rest of the poem, I would think the word "so" isn't needed in this line.

I smile

I laugh

I hide my tears because

This is all great, but since the rest of your lines aren't starting with a caps, don't capitalize this either - even though it's an "I". If you've ever read any poems by Rupi Kaur, which if you haven't I strongly recommend, you'll notice not a single letter is capitalized.

screams around me

While this line by itself is fine, it just doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem. I think it'd flow better if you removed this.

but I just smile

I only quote this because of my previous suggestion on lower-casing the "I".

Miranda's rights

Would lower-case "Miranda's". Again, I know it's a proper noun and that normally you would want to capitalize this by any means, but poetry seems to have its own rules. At least from what I've observed.

Don't listen.

She is crazy.

39 victims

friends surround me

So many heads.

All lined up.

Written on the wall.

"Friends surround me"

And I again quote this for the same reason in regards to the caps.

Alright, well so that wraps that up! I enjoyed this poem to be honest with you, even though I've never been big on horror work. This was well done!