Young Writers Society

Hey! MoonIris,
Yours is a beautifully written poetry. A work full of creativity, imagination and a message too! It is hard to find write-ups with a mixture of all these. Your desire to touch the sky would certainly be fulfilled. As for your work, I must say it was fabulous. I wish you all the luck!

Best wishes
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Hi MoonIris!
I love this poem! It is so cute and clever. I have always been a big Disney fan and this poem was so fun to read. It makes me want to go listen to Disney music right now. I love how you took lines from a bunch of different songs but combined them in a way that makes sense and creates a new message. I only have one suggestion for you. In my opinion, I think that you should replace the last line "And my dream is a wish my heart makes" with something else because I just don't feel like it fits with the rest of the poem as well as it could. That being said, this was very well written and such a fun poem. I hope that you write something else like this in the future. Keep writing and good luck on your future works, I hope to read more of them.

I love how you used Disney songs to write this. I love the way you used them, it completely flows. I can tell that you are inspired by Disney, to write this. I especially love those particular songs you have referenced. Keep up the good work. Can't wait to see what you have next.

This is great! I think that you’ve had a stroke of genius here. I will admit, I was not expecting much when I first clicked into this piece, but you proved me wrong! You managed to create an actual narrative out of almost exclusively Disney song names. This is really clever, and also a nice little poem about dreams and aspirations. Good job!

This is really good and I loved it! If you're into challenges with your writing, you should also try taking lyrics from different songs and combining them together to make a poem.

I really enjoyed it. I recognized all of the songs. I like how you combined all of the songs that talked about dreams and being free. It's such a great representation of a theme often used in Disney. The only thing I would say to work on in the future is how you segue from each title to another. You did a pretty good job of it but there's a spot or two where it sounded a bit awkward. The main one being the very last line of the poem. Don't be afraid to alter the wording just a little bit to help it make sense. Just make sure it's still recognizable. That's the hard things about these poems.

Overall, you still did a great job and I loved the poem so much. I really hope you keep on doing stuff like this and I look forward to reading more of your writing!

Hello, MoonIris
I think it is clever how you incorporated the disney songs into your poem. Sadly i only recognized two of them. When will my life begin, and painting with all the colours of the wind. I'm not sure about the loyal, brave, true...i mean i don't know if it's a song or not but it reminded me of Merida from Brave. She is a Disney princess i really admire for her fierceness, her ability to joke around and have a good time with her dad and brothers. She can be a bit childish though, like when she went to that witch and accidentally got her mother transformed into a bear. Anyway this poem rocks!