Published April 23, 2011
I wrote this poem while I was on a walk, and the trees started to blow. Then this just kinda came to me. It was only a coincidence that it was on Earth Day 
I hope you enjoy it!
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Hi there! I really liked this poem no matter how short it was! It's really pretty! Good job and keep it up! I really liked it!
- gleek456 <3
I agree. It needs to be expanded on, and imagery is really good at that. Try to add detail, because you have a good idea. I like short poetry, but adding detail doesn't make it bad. It makes it better. It makes it poetic and graceful, and I think this poem could use a bit more of that.
Keep Writing,
Bel
Hello there.
I'm sorry to say but I think that this poem was a big lump of cliches. Except the Listen part.
You need to lengthen it a bit and add imagery to the sentences. Imagery can work wonders, you know.
And make it a flow freely just like the wave. xD Sorry for the failed laughter.
I have nothing more to say until you make it a poem that will make me push the "like" button.
I know you can do it.
Keep writing and start editing. xD
The way the ocean waves the repetition or 'the way' takes away from your poem
The way the trees blow I really dislike the capitalization of every line.
The way the sun sets
The way the rain falls
The way the wind whispers
The world is speaking to uscomma
Listen
I like the idea, but it's too plain. Describe the way nature is talking, the leaves, the hues of the sunset.
Great ending.
Hi there. Lavvi in to review for you today.
Really, all you need, is to put commas at the end of each line and you're set. Perhaps lengthen the poem: it will add more substance.
You know, I thought this was too short and abrupt. Nature is smooth, supposed to blend well together. Well, here, it was like rocks banging against one another. Too choppy. I need some fluidity and this can be helped by punctuating correctly
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Lavvi
Please review this people! I need help!
It was a good base line I think, but maybe go back and add some detail to give us more of a wider picture to make this more interesting.
I think its pretty
Keep writing 
OK you said not to be afraid to be mean so here it goes XD: I think you need to work on the repetition; stead of using The way at the beginning most of the time. Also there is much you can add to this. Things you could use to drag us, readers, into it. This is really good and I love it just make it longer, make it draw us into it XD. Good luck and I hope this helps if you need any help please don't hesitate to send me a PM I'm willing to help ^^. Keep up the good work and may you receive many helpful reviews!!! Happy Writing!!!
Soulkana<3