Published May 12, 2010
The Perfect Kiss In This Fantasy
By: MissGamer8
It’s Friday night
The moon is bright
We’re standing at my door
You look at me with your hazel eyes
How can we be sure?
Your face is getting nearer
My heart is beating faster
Can this be?
Oh, please let this be!
(Chorus)
It’s like a hot rush over me
Your lips on mine, this is fine
All my worries washed away
Time has left and gone away
I can feel it in my toes
It’s like the sun coming close
Can this be?
It’s the perfect kiss, in this fantasy
By the time we broke apart
My heart had to restart
You hold me close
You hold me tight
Now everything feels alright
How can this be?
I never thought this could be
You’re coming close again
Oh, please let this be!
(Chorus)
It’s like a hot rush over me
Your lips on mine, this is fine
All my worries washed away
Time has left and gone away
I can feel it in my toes
It’s like the sun coming close
Can this be?
It’s the perfect kiss, in this fantasy
Oh, it’s the perfect kiss in this fantasy
The perfect kiss, the perfect kiss
(Chorus)
It’s like a hot rush over me
Your lips on mine, this is fine
All my worries washed away
Time has left and gone away
I can feel it in my toes
It’s like the sun coming close
Can this be?
It’s the perfect kiss, in this fantasy
It’s Friday night
The moon is bright
We’re standing at my door
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
140,831 Literary Works • 673,694 Reviews
This song was inspired by Taylor Swift. She's my favorite singer.
That was really sweet! The innocence apparent in the lyrics reminds me of Taylor Swift and I could see this being a good country or acoustic song. You've probably captured what some girls feel the "perfect kiss" would be. You do have some potential and overall it was a good set of lyrics.
Hey, this was pretty good. It had a very good rhyme scheme for a while, but sort of fell apart in the second verse. Also some of the rhymes were just repeats of words and that could be better. I feel as though this would be a great pop/dance song. It just had that sort of bouncy vibe for me. I also feel as though it was a little repetitive though, and I understand how some songs are like that, but I suppose it could work with the right background music. I think if there was a longer bridge it could be fantastic. The way I read it I feel like it slowed down then and then built back up. Pretty neat!
Not the most impressive song ever, but you have great potential. Awesome work, Jame.
Hello
I absolutely love the chorus; especially the part about time going away and stuff. The lyrics are good. I think you have a gift there.
Personally I liked this a lot.
The chorus was my favorite part out of the whole thing...although it seemed to make up pretty much most of the song.
Is there maybe just one more verse you can make up and add to it?
Otherwise it's very repetitive...which I suppose isn't always a bad thing...
but still.
Anyways. *Clicks Like*