Published March 16, 2011
I often wonder how,
Or why,
People can just stand there,
As they watch another cry,
I know the answer,
FEAR,
The scary thought,
We all hear,
The hiss that slithers,
Through our heads,
An evil thought,
My mind once read,
I was teased,
Picked on,
Called an idiot,
Called a slob,
How different my life,
Could have been,
If there was no fear,
If I had on friend,
Our lives can destroy fear,
And help the many,
That desevre our tears
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Hello twin. Ehte here for the review.
The flow was missing from your piece. If you try working on this a bit i think you could just make it. And do take care of the punctuations too.
Keep writing.
Hey there,
Great poem. I know for certain that many are bullied and teased even as adults. This is something many can relate to even if they weren't bullied they must have watched someone being bullied. And yup the answer truly is FEAR. Guess we should learn to overcome it. Bravo!!
Keep it up!!
xxx Upile xxx