Hey Mialynire,
Your poem, as i scroll down, made me feel intrigued more than ever before.
So far my experience goes, the first 5-6 lines could be polished and rescaled in the choice of pronouns or to say more precisely the starters of the lines can get to your standard with a little more efforts combined herewith.
Afer all, the picturesque you wanted to color in the amazing poem was heart-touching and at the same time thought provoking in a very secret way. This silent trigger of imagination is beyond any applaud, I want to adore it for life long.
Hoping for works from you on a frequent basis.
Diap
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