Published October 21, 2008
~Here's part two, Enjoy!
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Part 2
Other House
Grandma Essie lives in a small neighborhood
that seems to be on a private road. Grabbing my
luggage, I look at the other houses. Except one
stands out within the others. The next door house
looks very Victorian.
I could tell that there is a family who lives
next door. A white wrap around porch and
swinging bench for moonlit nights. Baby blue
shutters for the warm spring, colorful hanging
plants and a yard full of gorgeous flowers. I
should definitely make my self known to the
neighbors.
New Room
Walking into my new room, I see a
twin sized bed. I smile, as I look at the colors
of the comforters. Green and black. My favorite.
There are about a half a dozen pillows and a
chest at the end.
Unpacking my belongings, I scan the room for
other discoveries. Glancing at the desk, I see a
laptop. Rushing over, I see a note that says...
-To Hailey from Grandma Essie.
“Thanks.” As I whispered to myself, knowing
it was for her.
Afterwards I placed my clothes in the
mahogany colored dresser. “Huh,” Sighing
at my pasty white walls, I thought what I would do.
Maybe I should paint them, or tape up some posters.
Only time will tell...
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Wow, another great chapter - there really is no other word I can think of using - you'vce rendered me speachless (: I loved how you described the neighbour's house - awesome imagery
Off to part three ...
--Lucyy xx
Okay, now I see that she is moving in permantently, right? Hopefully that clears up as I read on
I really found no mistakes again. Your flow and everything is just perfect. I woud try to rewrite the beginning a little, though, because it was kind of rough, with the Victorian and all.
Other than that, good job!
*on to part three*