Published August 21, 2008
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This is a seriously great story you got going on here!! It's so addictive, I can't think of any ways in which to improve it at all & your characters are so engaging, I want to immediatly know more about them, especially James and why he was glaring at Sophia ... hmm ... well I guess I shall have to read on to find out
Lucyy xx
i wonder why James was so rude to Sophia. and oh, i hope Helena isn't in love with James if he's one of the suitor for Sophia. i don't want any hard feelings between those two girls.
well, i am off to read the third chapter part one and then part won. i hope you add more soon. i like your story.
good luck with your writing.
Hiya, Merry! I am growing quite fond of this story! This is my favorite chapter so far. And the way James glares at Sophia….hmm…I wonder what that is about…?
I guess I will just have to wait until the next chapter
Small “s” on “said”
Comma instead of a period after “dear”
Comma after “is”
Comma after “fine”
Comma instead of a period after “John”
Small “t” on “the”
Comma after “more”
All of this individuals were grammatical things, so no worries there
Keep up the good work, Merry!