Hello there!
I am here to review your short story. This felt like a personal piece where you mentioned about this boy Carson and his importance in the life of the narrator. You wrote about some of his sayings and beliefs that were quite meaningful and motivational. May be you intended it to be some form of diary entry, I am not quite sure. It was like a small token of appreciation for this boy who had a significant role in keeping the narrator motivated and being a firm support in his or her life.
The self-doubt that the narrator is having regarding whether he/she is being able to return the same happiness and love that Carson has shown. Whether the narrator is as good friend to him or not. These things did remain unanswered though the little information that we get to know about his character makes me believe it is just the narrator's thinking that makes her doubt her side of friendship. May be that's what happens when we get such a precious person in our lives that we begin to have second thoughts as whether we deserved such a good person in our lives or not.
As for critique, some of the minor mistakes were already pointed out by previous reviewers. Other than that here are some suggestions.
My friends love language is expressing it through words.
friend's
"Don't worry about doing great things, just live your life."
It's better to capitalize the first letter of dialogue. Same thing with another dialogue you used.
Overall I felt it was a nice and sweet piece of writing and I enjoyed it. Keep sharing your work with us.
Great work!
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