Published September 28, 2005
I could use a fresh beginning too
All of my regrets are nothing new
This is a way, that I say I need you
This is a way, this is a way
That I'm learning to breathe,
I'm learning to crawl,
I'm finding that you, and you alone
Can break my fall.
I'm living again, awake and alive.
I'm dying to breathe beneath abundant skies...
-SWITCHFOOT "LEARNING TO BREATHE"
Ever just feel completely happy? Like nothing is going to go wrong for once, and that you actually mean something to someone. 'Cause that's how I feel right now. I'm not on the ground anymore, I'm watching from the sky the rest of the world breathing and smiling. And as I sit here thinking of how life gets so much better, after your broken and bruised on the ground, I realize that there is hope in life.
There is hope for everyone. Life gets better at some point, it can take a minute, a day, ten years, or forever. But life will get better. Even in the hardest of times, you need to keep your head up and walk yourself into the future, because that is where you may find happiness.
I just want to make everyone feel like they can achieve happiness like I have. You can do it. You need to set yourself out to find it and it will come to you. Don't ever doubt that.
"And when you see, see the beauty, all around and in yourself, and it will help you feel okay. And when you pray, pray for strength to help you carry on, when the troubles come your way. And when you dream, dream big. As big as the ocean blue. 'Cause when you dream it might come true, and when you dream, dream big."
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Hello! It's review month, and I'm filling up my checklist challenge. You're probably not going to see this, but I'm going to review this anyway.
I'm not familiar with it, but the poem (or song) is pretty.
The first paragraph is a nice start to an inspirational message.
The narrator's on cloud nine!
This is really lovely, and it's a message I live by.
Overall, it flowed nicely, and the message was beautiful.
Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: So...this was just a nice little message to people. And that's about all I can think of. I don't see much else happening here in terms of a plot or anything like that to point on but honestly who cares. If you are conveying a lovely message like this by all means just say so.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Not sure what that opening is from actually so I will not be mentioning anything regarding that.
Well that sounds like a really nice frame of mind to be in. Definitely catches my attention here as a start to a story.
This is a lovely to message to include and this is something I personally swear by so I like this thing even more.
And more happiness. I don't know how much I needed to read something like this among the rest of the depressing works that haunt the part of the site that I am currently on. So great job there making me feel good about myself which is hard to do.
Aaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: So this was just a nice little piece of writing. And I loved it. It flowed nicely, the language was beautiful. Overall just a really nice piece and that's literally all I have to say about it.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Yeah, it is. I do feel that it doesn't all go together well, but I've been in such a writing mood, apart from the song, that I write whatever comes to mind. Prehaps I should add more or space it out? Just a question. And just to clear things up, I will credit the song to Switchfoot. Right now in fact. I just felt that it went good with the story when writing it, but I guess not.
Switchfoot's song, Learning to Breathe.
The little snippits of text here feel more like diologue out of a monologue than anything else. I really like the second bit. These would work very well as parts of diologue among two people. You even put the last stanza in quotes, which solidifies that in my mind. I'm not sure if this is poetry, or a short story. It almost looks like a journal entry to me. Overall this is decent, but it doesn't feel connected, other than the similar subject matter, and I do feel strongly that each part belongs in something seperate from one another, wheather or not they are in the same piece, they dont belong right next to eachother. There is serious potential for story in between them.