As we sit here side by side
I think of what we could do
I really wish I was yours
But now I'm dying inside
I can't stop feeling this way
I just won't look away
All the pain this brings
I just wish you feel the same
I know that were just friends
I hope that never ends
But I want so much more
Maybe it works out in the end
I can't stop feeling this way
I just won't look away
All the pain this brings
I just wish you feel the same
As I sit here all alone
I only wished that you had stayed
The way I feel about you
Will never go away
Oh no they won't ever change
I can't stop feeling this way
I just won't look away
All the pain this brings
I just wish you feel the same
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ok...so i found your work very intresting its like a personel situation and you wrote it from
your heart ...i looved how you started this song just like a story or something ...
As we sit here side by side
I think of what we could do
I really wish I was yours
But now I'm dying inside ..
i wish i could read more of your wonderful songs ..
see you around
I thought that this was very good.
It's a little short and could use some more punctuation, such as commas, colons, semi-colons, and periods.
However, that is merely me stating my opinion and if you believe that it's alright the way that it is, that's okay.
This is the second chorus, and the line that I bolded out was the only one that was red. Sadly, I couldn't make it red in this review since I only memorized the text codes and not the color codes. I'm not that much of a nerd.
I really think that you can expand this, since the only real problem is that it is so short.
Anyway, that's my two-sense for today!
Peace,
HT
hi. sup. g'day(yep im from australia) im alilovessandy(thats my horse. everone thinks its a boyfriend or something.)
this is a really good song. just 2 things
1. the second chorus isnt all in red. i just thought i would point that out so you can fix it.
2. it seams a little ok alot short for a song.
other then thoes two little thing the song was great. i would love to see it in action. do you sing or play an instrument so i can see what the tune is or are you just a song writer. either way someone whould put this to good use and come up with the music. it would be an amazing song.
anyway in the interest of points. how are you? whats your name? how old are you? where are you from? are you a school studient or a full time writer? do you have a writing partner? i do. we are writing a book together. its gonna be terrifying. i understand if you dont want to answer these thing beacause as far as you know im some creepy middle aged pedo hiding in his basement eating chips. im not if it makes you feel anybetter. im a highschool student from australia. (is it strange that i just used that exsample in another review? wow i just realised how creepy i am) anyway to explain myself i am really good at babbling and as i am your first reviewer i am trying to make the most of the situation as i desperatly need points.
anyway i look forward to reading your stuff in the future. good luck in your writing indevors. and have a nice day
this review is from alilovessandy who apreciates the points you have given her.
(again sorry for the babbling and the spelling(i have dislexia aswell wich i cant spell( its a horrible irony)) and sadly yes i do talk this much in real life