Published October 14, 2010
The smile and laugh is only a mask to fool the world, memories from the past haunt her as she sleeps she'll never love the way she once did, she doesnt know how long this cherade will last she curls up at night wanting someone to love her. People taunt her laugh and even stalk her to this world she's another lonley face invisable or even a ghost, what she wants is to have someone to be there for her before she leave this empty life
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Thankyou most of what i write is about my experiences and the experiences of those close to me.
I'll remember that for next time
Many girls are able to relate to this and that's what I really like about it. So many people get this feeling at one point in their lives. However, try to use better vocab. This could really help the poem to feel more heart warming.
Thankyou,i honestly ddn't think it was that good my moods and different situations inspre what i write about.
<3
i thought you'd like the ghost reference
This is all that I can say about this amazing piece; it works better with the stanza's my dear.
This is so powerful and emotive, and yet there is a mystery.
It's amazing. <3
P.S the ghost reference made my day.