As stated by the Wikipedia, technology is the making, modification, usage and knowledge of tools, machines, techniques, crafts, systems and methods of organization in order to solve a problem, improve a pre-existing solution to a problem, achieve a goal, handle an applied input or output relation or perform a specific function. In more ways than one modern technology if not abated, ruins more than help our life. Nowadays, internet is used to create violence. It deeply worsens the lives of people and even bringing them close to the point of death. Lies are produced and peddled indiscriminately. No one can stop this anymore from proliferating. It is continuously happening right before our eyes. According to Peters (2008), technology is the present world and it affects people’s daily lives. With the advent of social media, everybody has his or her own freedom to share or post. Netizens are free to post even lies and make-up stories – nasty things which are not prohibited to be posted at those social media even in Facebook, the most visited of the networking sites. Internet users’ threatening ordinary people is just a common occurrence. Many people in this cyberspace world experience cyber bullying and spanked with libelous and malicious posts. Hence, the glaring disadvantages of modern technology include but are not limited to, invasion of privacy, addiction to modern technology, and excessive reliance on technology.
In our society where technology is rapidly growing, controversy over our privacy rights has indeed arisen beyond our expectations. As stated by, Hauden (2009), the web is rich resource of shameless cheating strategies. With the popularity of the internet, cell phones, ATM and credit cards, it is obvious that Filipinos enjoy the convenience that has come a long way with technology. Fleming (2013) added that, cheating has become a common place in schools, because students are using technology to gather and share information in rather innovative ways. But sad to say, the popularity of internet and personal computers also pose threats to the users’ privacy. According to the Wikepedia, a law, also called the Cybercrime Law, has been passed by the government that aims to protect and safeguard the integrity of computer, computer and communications systems, networks, and databases, and the confidentiality, integrity, and availability of information and data stored therein, from all forms of misuse, abuse, and illegal access by making punishable under the law such conduct or conducts. This law covers all types of illegal schemes that use one or more components of the internet. It also punishes any criminal activity done using electronic gadgets, creation and distribution of different computer viruses, posting confidential information on the internet and even bank theft. While personal computers and arrival of the internet have made our lives easier in many ways, it is unfortunate that some misguided people use these products of technology to take due advantage of others.
With more and more advancements being made with modern technology, it is also ironically becoming more and more common for people around the world to become addicted to it. As what was explained by Waters (2013), the 21st century classroom is a wonder of online tools and content that students can access from an ever- evolving range of personal mobile devices with capabilities only dreamed of less than a decade ago. It maybe because technology continuously offers a world of unique possibilities to people of all ages, and cultures that it becomes hard for them to refuse. The common gadget everyone loves – the mobile phone, has many mind-blowing features that undeniably hook many of its users. Hence, even with perseverance and patience, it becomes a difficult task for the users to abruptly conquer this unforgiving obsession. Although technology can be useful as can be gleaned in many ways, it could also be very dangerous, hazardous, and harmful to those who become extremely dependent upon it for it uncontrollably drives dishonest and unprincipled people to deceive and mislead others – to the point of defrauding banks and governments.
Technology has a profound effect on how individuals conduct themselves in everyday life. In today’s world, technology is essential. It influences everything by bringing about a great level of convenience. Enderle (2005) stated that, almost half of personal computer owners say they can't imagine life without their computers. With this new convenience, humans are now becoming lazy. Advances in medicine has cured many diseases but also developed antibiotics for common diseases. This has weakened our immune systems and with this, many people now rely on medication to fight off small ailments rather than leave it to our bodies. For this reason, as the technology continues to improve, it has begun to replace our existing human abilities.
In this time, the technology offers us a big number of services that facilitate in a monumental way of our lives, like phone services, internet, and automatic teller machines. These technological services help us for making our life a little more pleasant and easier to take. But the same as their advantages, this modern technology possess a great quantity of disadvantages which affects the development of our life. This serves as a distraction in many people. Now we have seen the impacts of the modern technology in our life, it is our responsibility to use technology to improve our lives but we also have to make sure that we preserve our society and environment, if we don’t control the usage of technology, we shall end up harming both the society and environment.
Lat, Ma. Catherine P
BS ECE-T1B
De La Salle Lipa
Technology can serve as both a messiah and a cause for destruction. I am here to talk about the positives. With the help of this guide for cloud app security for office 365 at https://spinbackup.com/blog/office-365- ... uide-2019/, I was able to prevent myself from losing data and protecting it from various threats. We should not be afraid of technological improvements, but we should be cautious.
Hey there! I'm Onyx and I will be reviewing your article as promised. Sorry this is later than expected! 
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So what is your thesis statement? For me, it is not clearly stated. Now for the first body paragraph, what is your topic sentence? Are you talking about cheating or invasion of privacy? You can use talk about cheating but you come out and use it in the beginning and then talk about what you really need to. I wouldn't add so much fluff. I would make it to the point with adding some pathos and logos. Alright, so here are a few things I would like to draw your attention too. You don't have to use these changes or anything like that. These are just a few things I have noticed. So here we go,
As stated by the Wikipedia, technology is the making, modification, usage and knowledge of tools, machines, techniques, crafts, systems and methods of organization in order to solve a problem, improve a pre-existing solution to a problem, achieve a goal, handle an applied input or output relation or perform a specific function.
According to Peters (2008),
Thank you for your time and sorry this review is later than expected! Again, thank you,Hi Maria,DK with review
As stated by the Wikipedia, technology is the making, modification, usage and knowledge of tools, machines, techniques, crafts, systems and methods of organization in order to solve a problem, improve a pre-existing solution to a problem, achieve a goal, handle an applied input or output relation or perform a specific function.
Hey Maria,
Well , first let me start of by saying, Very bold choice.
Here is the part i liked;
"As stated by the Wikipedia, technology is the making, modification, usage and knowledge of tools, machines, techniques, crafts, systems and methods of organization in order to solve a problem, improve a pre-existing solution to a problem, achieve a goal, handle an applied input or output relation or perform a specific function.
In more ways than one modern technology if not abated, ruins more than help our life. Nowadays, internet is used to create violence. It deeply worsens the lives of people and even bringing them close to the point of death. Lies are produced and peddled indiscriminately. No one can stop this anymore from proliferating. It is continuously happening right before our eyes. According to Peters (2008), technology is the present world and it affects people’s daily lives. With the advent of social media, everybody has his or her own freedom to share or post. Netizens are free to post even lies and make-up stories."
Because not only is it true, It can spark an argument. But it has a valid point, I personally agree with you but, and that's a big but. We being humans, are addicts of technology. So it's kind of a dilemma, weather or not, to contribute to the technology addiction or live a simple life without it. But honestly who can do that?
Sorry i got lost, in my opinion/ review. Anyway I liked it, And even though i said it already in the beginning, it's a bold choice, but also a tough one to tackle.
Keep writting.
Good article, I would advice that as much as possible refrain from using hyphen and long words. The long words are like "not prohibited" and etc. Instead of using a negative statement find a word which is synonymous to "not prohibited". This is only my suggestion, but overall nice work
ahm sa akin lang po ndi ksi advisable pra sa akin ang pgmit ng wikipedia as a source ksi po madali maedit ang content sa wikipedia actually anyone can edit the content in wikipedia....
Wikipedia is a NO NO as a source in any technical writing for the main reason that the content of this webpage can be edited. That means we are not really so sure whether all information there are valid and acceptable. Try to use a reputable source online where credibility is a great factor. Also, come up with academic writing. Use proper words in your sentence construction and try to organize your thoughts properly. There must be harmony in presenting your ideas in every paragraph. You have a nice article in general. Congratulations.
Wikipedia is a NO NO as a source in any technical writing for the main reason that the content of this webpage can be edited. That means we are not really so sure whether all information there are valid and acceptable. Try to use a reputable source online where credibility is a great factor. Also, come up with academic writing. Use proper words in your sentence construction and try to organize your thoughts properly. There must be harmony in presenting your ideas in every paragraph. You have a nice article in general. Congratulations.
I'll just speak in Filipino language:) o kaya Taglish na lang
Anong literary type to? essay?
paragraph 1- di lang masyado magandang magrely sa wikipedia, kasi pwedeng iedit ng iba yung wikipedia although knowledgeable sila dun sa various topics, one example is yung sa negative effects ng technology advancements sa society. Mas okay siguro kung start ka na lang sa quotations, o kaya rhetorical questions, or story. Then, pinoint mo kasi agad yung negative effects sa first paragraph, dapat inroduction part lang yung first paragraph. O kaya adopt ka ng saying or statements na nanggaling sa mga kilalang tao or sa journals, thesis, etc. gaya nung "According to Peters (2008)". Tapos medyo nafocused din yung last sentences ng first paragraph mo sa social media at cyberspace, dapat ibroaden mo muna yung subtopics about technology.
Paragraph 2- give the readers a background (facts) of what was the world before hanggang sa naggogrow yung statements mo, yung pinapakita mo yung evolution nung society dati hanggang sa society ngayon.
Nagfocus ka din sa cheating at cybercrime, dapat after nung background, state ka ng positive at negative facts kahit konti para masupplement yung paragraph 1 mo. Kasi sabi mo dun tsaka dun sa quote na kinuha mo modernized na nowadays, kailangan makita kung papano, tsaka san nahugot yung statements na yun pati yung ruined people's lives, etc.
then, state mo kung ano yung specific negative effects nung technology.
paragraph 3 and the next paragraphs- dito mo simulan idiscuss yung mga negative effects na yun, one by one halimbawa nilagay mo sa 2nd paragraph-"Some common negative effects of technology are as follows: cheating, cyber bullying, social discrimination, health, medicine, teenagers, privacy, daily routines, hobbies, studies, etc." para mabigyan ng supporting details kada subtopics.
Tapos, kada subtopics na yan dapat magkakahiwalay, pag cheating dapat sa isang paragraph cheating lang ang makikita. Then, state facts, situations, specific examples, tapos kung may laws, lagay mo na din, effects ganyan, kasi dun sa cybercrime nilagay mo yung law, then sa iba wala na, parang nakukulangan yung ibang subtopics.
sa ending paragraph- bigay mo yung conclusion, yung summary or may point nung mga previous paragraphs, tapos sa dulo lagyan mo nung striking statement.
(always put your sources- para di sabihing plagiarism)
(be specific sa examples at facts, wag mo masyado ibroaden kasi hindi nagiging malinaw yung whole, para di din lumabas na playing safe yung buong composition)
okay naman yung terms na ginamit mo arrange mo lang yung order..))))
Ang haba nakakatamad basahin . pero gets ko naman. hahahaha no to cyber bullying and pornography and cheating
Hi there, Maria and welcome to YWS! I hope you're enjoying the site and sharing your essay with us!
Overall, I believe you made some very good points about the negative side of technology. While it does benefit us in many ways, it also has consequences.
However, I do agree with Cailey that the focus is very broad. While you bring up many good points, the topics cover everything from cyberbullying to cheating to online privacy to medicine. They aren't easily linked and so they weaken your argument.
What I would do instead is pick two or three of these and see what common links they have to make a stronger thesis. For example, both cyberbullying and cheating come from people applying technology to bad things people were doing before the Internet.
Another thing I would consider is making your examples more specific. For example, instead of citing a general page saying students use the Internet to cheat, why not find a real example from a newspaper article or a study about how many students cheat with technology? This will show that your arguments are happening in the real world.
. According to the Wikepedia, a law, also called the Cybercrime Law, has been passed by the government that aims to protect and safeguard the integrity of computer, computer and communications systems, networks, and databases, and the confidentiality, integrity, and availability of information and data stored therein, from all forms of misuse, abuse, and illegal access by making punishable under the law such conduct or conducts.
Advances in medicine has cured many diseases but also developed antibiotics for common diseases. This has weakened our immune systems and with this, many people now rely on medication to fight off small ailments rather than leave it to our bodies.
All right, Knight Cailey here with the requested review. I didn't mean to do any reviews tonight, but decided to write two because there were so many. But since you asked me to check yours I will do my best, even though I should be doing homework or sleeping.
First off, I strongly suggest not starting off with Wikipedia. A lot of teachers don't even accept Wikipedia as a valid source, and since it's the easiest thing to find information on- using it right off the bat suggests that you didn't do much research, which I know is absolutely not true because I saw how many sources you have and I can tell that a lot of work went into this project. Still, Wikipedia isn't a great hook. I'd suggest starting with a quote or a short story, or just go right away with your opinion.
I do want to say that I love that you took the opposing view here. All of the other three essays I read were about how technology is good and helpful, so I like that you took the other side and chose to write about how technology can be harmful instead of helpful.
I think you could do a better job at presenting your points, though. Make it very clear what your arguments are going to be, and start each paragraph by returning to your thesis statement, which is that technology can be bad, and then in the first sentence of the paragraph try to say why it's bad.
This will help your piece look more organized, and it will help make your points even more clear.
Also, I think you could work on your conclusion some more. Like I said already, I really like the viewpoint you chose to present in your argument. But stick to the argument!! In the end you started mentioning how technology is good, and how we're just using it too much and incorrectly and that's why it's bad. No! Don't do that!! Don't give in to the opposing side, not even a little bit. This will really help make your point stronger.
Even if you don't entirely believe what you are writing, it will sound much better if you stick to a clear "no" without giving any reasons for the reader to believe otherwise. Don't give any exceptions or excuses. Just say no and then tell why no.
Overall, you did a great job, and I bet this will get a good grade.
I hope my review was helpful and let me know if you have any questions.
-Knight Cailey
well for me, i guess that technology helps us in many aspects:
1. for students, it helps a lot in a way of using it in our school requirements and in our social life,,others said that it's not good to use technology to socialize with other people, but i guess it does help, just think about it and you'll know why.
2. for business, c'mon every business must have a system for them to be more efficient and reliable, so this is not debatable,, see how technology affects our way of living?..
3. in everyday life, well look at your self now, do you ever imagine your self not using any kinds of technologies?
case closed,, it is important in every way, every aspects of our life.
a very detailed Blog/Article . . just don't forget to put the sources at the last part of the blog. .
a very detailed article or blog... keep it up just don't forget to put the sources ,
the paragraph must not be exceed by 5 sentences...at the first place it would be difficult to read unless the said essay would prove something....another the essay seems boring, why? at first it was already a common knowledge the disadvantage of the technology, i think everybody is aware of the disadvantage of technology, also if would read i'd like to have some statements that would easily get my attention, truly i didn't finish the said essay because what i have said it is already common...that was my bad impression for the essay, now let me talk the other side which is the good side...i like the way you deliver your essay, the words are very well used, another you have been expressed your essay, you have a point of view in a way that you come up with a good essay considering your citations...overall, the essay was good in a scale of 10 i can give you a 8...keep up the good work Catherine Lat...
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Wikipedia is not a credible source. Also, you should include your reference list. Nice topic, by the way.
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