A Phone Call

"tell me your contact number again as i've lost my phone book", requested Rajan.

"981020024...."

".....& Shalini's ?"

"Isn't my number enough? What you gonna do with my wife's number", joked Sameer.

"Ahh.......planning to run away with her......happy?"

They both laughed loudly.

"981020025..."

"Thanks man...", said Rajan....with two air-tickets clutched in his palms.

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Manish8008 Comment

Thank you & same to you ! :)

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Glauke
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Haha thank you! :) Have a great Easter!

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Manish8008 Comment

No review is a stupid review !
Thanks for making time for my stuff.
Lets start from the start. The only reason why you are finding lots of capitalization error is because of the 'kind of write' it is. When you are having a story & you have to end it within or in 55 words that's how it goes. You need to keep things blank somewhere & give an idea to reader about filling up that blank. No non-sense stuff. About the phone numbers, the numbers are perfectly fine but missing one digit. That is intentionally ! ;-)
Never under-estimate yourself. That was a true review given by you. Appreciate that.

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Glauke
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Glauke wrote a review · Sun Apr 24, 2011 8:25 pm

Hey manish! Looks good, but watch out for capitalization errors. There are lots!
Also, this might just be because I'm a morbid cross between a bunny and a unicorn (bunnycorn), but I do notice that the phone numbers don't have the correct number of numbers. (Who says 'number of numbers'?)
For example, your phone number couldn't have a two-digit area code. Or could it? No.

Thanks for reading my stupid and probably worthless review. Hope it helps. But it probably won't.

Mwah! Peace out!

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