It's not much of a critique, but I really love this. I prefer shorter poems anyways, and this has so much meaning and emotion packed into a few lines. It was very insightful and cynical..
On a technical note, the repetition added great rhythm and power to the poem as well, and I'm not usually a fan of it. Also, I like the long drawn out title..it adds character!
Bravo! Happy writing (:
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