I see your face,
my blood is on fire.
Churning.
You see me and smile,
my heart flutters.
Flip-flops.
You walk towards me,
my mind goes blank.
Thoughtless.
My searing blood races
through my veins
and attacks my over-active heart.
Churning and boiling,
spinning and burning.
Fire.
My skin gets hot,
I could combust.
No, I can't!
I scold myself.
Settle down and remember.
Hide in the shadows.
Cower in the shelter.
Don't let them know
The
truth.
Hide my emotions,
cover my feelings.
Smile.
Hug.
Fool them.
Just friends.
Everything is okay.
He'll never know.
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Oh....My....Gosh!!!!
Thank you for writing this poem, it is now one of my absolute favorites!
Its so true in my life right now! I like this guy and were total friends and i really like him and get just like that person in your poem when I see him! Oh my gosh how did you know? Perfect poem! Perfect (obviously) relatable and totally true with most girls. I agree with SmylinG on the part where you ended it perfect because its true! Unless you tell them, They wont know!!!!!!!!!!! '
LLLooovvveee your poem.
WIll click like.
Emmy
This makes me miss middle school. That's when I got all these fluttering feelings about my best crushes. Heat is the perfect title. I remember the feeling, and you took the words right out of my mouth. I love it. Especially this part:
Perfect explanation by far I've ever heard when it comes to young infatuation.
You ended the poem perfectly I think. By inserting the thought that he doesn't know or could at all possibly be aware of this reaction he gives you. You can only hope! Great poem. Good expressions.
Hello! Ktg here to review your poem!
Let me start out by saying that I'm not very good at poetry, but I'll do my best.
I really enjoyed this! I can totally relate to this feeling and I love the emotion going into this piece. You very clevery created this and I really really liked it. Thanks for the great read!!!!
Completely relateable :]
Ive been there and i've felt the pain of falling for a friend, and this poem pretty much sums it up!
Great job! I really like how you describe your heart flutters, flopping and beating super duper fast!
awesome-ness :]!