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Truth or Dare [1]

by LoveKatey


"Just give up now, Nora! You'll never catch me!" Skylar said, not even out of breath as he ran away from me. We were playing hide-and-seek-tag. I know, I know, what are two 16-year-olds doing playing hide-and-seek? Well, it's fun, okay?!

I found him hiding in between bushes, now the problem was catching him. I was fast and athletic, but he was more so. He was insanely fast and could run forever without having to stop. Me, I was already out of breath and getting that awful pain in my stomach.

"Oh yeah?" I said pushing harder across the grass of my huge backyard, and giving all I had to catch up to him. I was inches away from him in seconds. He pushed harder and we were circling around one of my mother's flower gardens. We were caught in a stalemate. Every time I went toward him he moved the other way.

"Oh yeah? What now, Curtis?" Skylar said, addressing me by my last name. I smiled.

"Oh I'm going to get you. Don't worry," I winked at him. "So wait... Skylar, what was that car you wanted?" His eyes lit up when I metioned cars. Skylar LOVED cars. He probably knew everything there is to know about them.

"A Jaguar! Or a Maserati! I really can't decide! They're both..." He went on about how great the are, giving me enough time to cut across to him and jump on his back.

"Gotcha!" I shouted in victory, hugging him closer to me.

"Yeah, well you better hide. And hide good, because as soon as I find you... You're dead," He smiled, let me down, and gave me a little push. I laughed and ran away after he covered his face and started to count to 30. I ran all the way around to the front of my house. I glanced in the window and saw Skylar's mother and my mother talking and laughing like the great friends they've always been.

"Skylar and Nora are so cute together out there playing hide-and-seek!" My mother chuckled. "I'm so happy they've stayed this close for this long!" At the mention of our friendship, it brought back memories of when we were little. Around four, probably, running around my back yard doing the exact same thing we were doing now. Our families have always been close and see eachother often.

My second favorite memory was probably when Skylar and I were seven years old. It was over the summer and we had been swimming in his pool all night.

"Nora! I have to show you something!" He called, running over to me, something cupped in his hands.

"What is it?" My eyes lit up with curiousity. Slowly, he spread his hands apart. I screamed and pushed his hands away. "Ew! I don't want to see a bug!" I yelled in my childish voice.

"No, no, no! It's a firefly! Look!" He let it go, and seconds after it lit up and bright green color. My eyes widened. He quickly caught it again before it flew too high. "See? I knew you'd like it, and I know you hate bugs. I wouldn't show it to you if I didn't think you'd think it was awesome." He smiled. I smiled back. "C'mon! There's a few in the way back! Let's go catch them!" The rest of the night we caught fireflies, ran around, and laughed. That night was the first night I ever saw a firefly. That night was also the night I developed my first crush.

Now, my all time favorite memory was my eighth birthday party. I had a ton of kids over to play, and when most of them had gone home, Skylar and his mother were still here. Skylar said he had to give me my present still.

"It's in the house! I'll be RIGHT back! Wait here!" He said, running into the house. He came out holding a little box wrapped in purple paper. "Open it!" He said with an excited look on his face. I opened it, excited too, to find one of the most beautiful necklaces ever. I was only 8, but even then I could tell how pretty it was. It had a silver chain and a small amythest as the pendant in the shape of a heart. I gave him a huge hug, practically tackling him to the ground. That's how much I loved the necklace. He leaned in a gave me a small peck on the cheek. From that day on, he acted as my best friend, my protector, and eventually, my boyfriend. From that day on, I have never once taken off the necklace.

Suddenly I was lifted up bridal style by a pair of strong arms. I stared up into the loving, green eyes of Skylar Lawrence Booker. We continued to stare at eachother a moment longer, before he whispered, "Gotcha," and kissed me softly on the lips. Every kiss, every touch left a tingling on my body. After all these years, I still haven't gotten used to how much I loved this kid.

Skylar placed me down and I ran away. "Betcha can't catch me now that I'm running!" I yelled back at him. He followed after, just to prove how wrong I was. He caught me. He picked me up from behind and swung me around. I laughed and squirmed. He put me down, but still hugged me close. He gently kissed my forehead. I sat down on the lawn and stared up at the sky. Skyler lay down next to me. My hands played with my necklace. Skylar just chuckled.

"I can get you a new necklace," he started. "I gave you that when we were eight. You wear it all the time," He was smiling.

"Yeah, well... I love it. It has a special meaning," I stated, smiling up at him.

"Oh? And what's that?" His hand had found my cheek and he ran his thumb across my lower lip. It sent shivers down my spine, and heated my face.

"It means... That... I love you," I said. He leaned in a kissed me, really kissed me, on the lips.

"I love you, too," he said, breathing heavily. We were silent for a while, just enjoying being with eachother as we always did. You could see the blue sky above slowly fading into a mix of pinks and oranges.

"So, Vince is having a party this Saturday, you know, for the end of the summer," Skylar started, breaking the silence. Vince Williams found a reason to have a party almost every weekend. "Do you want to go?" He asked, sitting up on his elbows.

"I would, but... Sophie has chemo..." My face fell. I always hated talking about Sophie and her luekemia. She was my 10-year-old little sister, and if I could, I would change places with her in a heart beat. I didn't think it was fair for a little girl to have cancer. It was such a horrible thought, and even more horrible that out of all of the people on this planet, MY little sister had cancer. Thinking about it practically brought tears to my eyes.

"Oh, right. I'm sorry." Skylar knew my pain, and felt it almost as much as I did. Since we've known eachother forever, Sophie was practically a sister to him, too. He sat up all the way, and kissed my cheek. I forced a smile. "You can still go." I didn't want him to feel like he couldn't go without me.

"Why would I?" He asked.

"I don't know. To hang out with your friends?" I said.

"Okay... But what's the point without you?" He smiled. I playfully hit him in the arm.

"Just go. Have fun," I insisted.

"Yeah, maybe. I'll think about it," Skylar replied back. "But, I still think it'll be no fun without you." He stood up and brushed off his pants. He extended his arm out to me and pulled me up. "It's getting buggy," Skylar said, insisting on going inside. Before entering the house, Skylar picked a flower- and orange lily- from one of the many gardens that flooded my backyard, and handed it to me. I couldn't help but smile at him. He tucked a strand of hair behind my ears- cliche, I know. But cute none-the-less.

I followed after him into my house. Our mothers were still sitting at the table, drinking iced tea, and laughing about something us kids would never understand. Same old story.


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Thu Apr 01, 2010 4:56 pm
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:D :D I loved your story when are you going to write more? Please let me know. It was sooooo cute. I liked the way they are best friends and a couple, it's pretty sad that her sister has a cancer. I want to know more :smt001 :smt001 Please,Please let me know when the next chapters are coming out :smt001 :smt001




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Tue Mar 02, 2010 12:36 am
Ktg17 says...



Love it! Great Job! I WANT TO READ MORE!!!!!




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Well, I wrote that reply late at night (writing this one at night too :) ) but I think I did mean exactly what you said. Just show more of how sad she is, or how she can't believe her sister has cancer. Anything to show more depth than just "I'm sad about it and don't think it's fair." Maybe a part of my negative reaction is I am skeptical when people claim to want to do anything to protect their loved ones (like trading places), so maybe my personal issues are just shining through, lol.
Once again, love this piece, and it seems to be very original!
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Thu Dec 24, 2009 5:40 am
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I love it!!

I only had problems picturing Skylar, what color are his eyes, his hair, what's cute about how he moves? ...Girls notice that. Continue on, though, I really liked it.

Keep it up,
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Thu Dec 24, 2009 12:40 am
pudin.junidf wrote a review...



Hey Katey!
I'll review your story today.
So, first of all I have to say I loved it! I loved the pace, the characters, the description. I have to say it was really good, especially since you hooked the reader ever since the first sentence and kept it going all through out the story which is something excellent.
Something which is also great is how you let us know your characters in depth and showed us their feelings, at least hers since I'm guessing she's the main character. But for a first chapter or prologue I have to say you were a bit too telly, a little more intrigue would have made the story even better.
As for plot, really good although I think you should state your plot line a little more. Maybe not for us since in the first chapter it would be too telly, but for you and develop it through the story.
Now for grammar, congrats to you! since your grammar was very good and the little spelling mistakes can be corrected with a little more of proofreading.
But there were times in the story in which you just told action, through action, through action and you should be careful with that. As well as with those parts that won't really help develop the plot. I'm telling you this now because for some reason I felt that if you are not careful there could be parts in this story that might slow down the plot. And why? Because is a romance story, and what a writer should think when doing a romance story is how that romance story is different to all the others and appealing to the reader without being cliche.
And, I liked the little twist at the end of your story, with her little sister suffering from cancer. To be honest if you develop that a little more, the story would be definitely unique. Maybe not in this chapter but through out the story.

So that's all I can see, and I definitely loved it, please keep update on this story. tell me when you're going to post more.

XOXO
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Wed Dec 23, 2009 11:57 pm
LoveKatey says...



Heyyy, Karma. Thanks for reviewing my story xD I'm glad you thought it was cute!
So about the first thing, I didn't even realize it said "I said" Both times. I shall change that!
And for the second thing, do you mean show more emotion? Like, make her seem more upset? Does it seem too "Oh, well that's really sad, but whatever"?
I'll work on it. Thanks for the advice xD

And to Juls, I'm sorry. I didn't notice that. That's quite silly of me! Thanks for catching that. That'll be changed. I think I'll stick with Skylar.

xD
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Really cute. :)You changed the spelling of Skyler a lot in the story. I'm not sure how you mean to spell it, but it changed from Skyler to Skylar several times. Just a little note. And also there were some small spelling mistakes, you might want to just double check. Even if things are cliche, how can you not love them?

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Mon Dec 21, 2009 11:48 pm
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Hi, this is Karma! This story is so cute! It was really nice and sweet. Also, I was certain that this would be another story where one of the best friends has a crush on the other, and you pleasantly surprised me when they were already in a relationship.

"I love you, too," I said, breathing heavily.

I'm pretty sure that, in context, this should be "he said".

She was my 10-year-old little sister, and if I could I would change places with her in a heart beat. I didn't think it was fair for a little girl to have cancer.

Okay, up until now this story was very heartfelt, honest, and, above all, believable. This bit, however seemed very cliche, and just what you wold expect a sibling of someone with cancer to say if the author didn't know what it was like. If her sister really had cancer, her feelings about it would probably be much more complex, and you don't really show that. I hope you get my drift, because I don't think I'm being very clear. Feel free to ask questions if that turns out to be true.

Anyway, I really liked this, and like I said, it was super cute. I hope you continue it.

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Sun Dec 20, 2009 4:04 pm
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Around 4, probably, running around my back yard doing the exact same thing we were doing now. Our families have always been close and see eachother often.

Spell numbers out, that's what I learned, it makes your writing look a lot more attractive.
Eachother should be each other.
I just want to warn you, if you didn't already know, that first-person point of view can be tricky. Be VERY careful as to not confuse your readers.

Great great great! love the story, keep writing!!





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