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Henlo, poet. I am Jade and I am here to review your work.
So first things first I love this so much. So realistic and the imagery works together with everything. The way you described some things gave me a sense of dread and makes me think this is about sense memory since you mentioned different senses more than once.
When mentioning touch and smell, it brings upon memories of physical abuse and violation which I believe may be rape and I think there are traces of mental abuse in there when you mentioned being all alone and the unwanted affection hitting like blows.
Throughout the poem I noticed that you never used 'I' or 'she' so I think it may have to do with fear keeping you from speaking out; that they are too scared to say anything in fear of him coming back.
My favorite section of the poem would have to be from stanza 9 to stanza 18 only because it portrays so much in so little lines. You can basically see the fear and abuse rolling off these parts in waves and I like that about it because I believe that poems must have that effect on people.
Anyways, I really loved this and I really look forward to seeing many more poems from you Louisiana15. Also, I used to live in Louisiana, I really enjoyed it and it's environment. Random I know but had to throw it in there.
Points: 545
Reviews: 29
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