Published October 24, 2011
Love the World
This world is extraordinary
Too remarkable to be true
Appreciation is what it needs
As is gets older day by day
On a clear summers night
You see the stars shining
One always stands out
And it feels special to you
Have you ever been far away?
And everything is very different,
So unlike you’re sure it’s a new world
Yet it isn’t and it never will be
The number of humans is big
Yet we’re all different
With different expectations
Like yourself and me
So many animals in this world
Some are so detailed and interesting
I could watch them all day
But I’ll never know who made them
But we’re mean to our dear world
We pollute and think nothing of it
However some people are nice to it
But they suffer in their deprived country
I love this world
But I hate how unfair it is.
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hey.. I really liked your poem.. It flowed well and good thing by avoiding the rhyme.. only thing I felt that could be improved was the neding.. I think you should do something more innovative with it.. those two lines just aren't enough... Hope it helps..
Harshita:)
I like the fact that I could apply this to my own situation and emotions and then just as easily apply it to the lady that lives next door, for example. It captures everybodys feelings as it doesn't go in to specific details, but gives enough for you to affiliate yourself with it. Does this make sense? I suppose what I'm trying to say is that iot speaks to everyone, no matter the issue
Very well written. Your poem seemed to kind of speak to me, but not exactly. You know? It was the fact that it was so truthful that really seemed to "speak to me" , I suppose. Anyway...Good job. Keep up the good work.
The ending just set it off, very well done. Good Job.