together forever
you once told me that you wouldn't let go
but you did I hope one day I forgive you
and that we can be happy together
again forever.
by Me for my Nanny
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Grammer! Grammer! Grammer! You need to work on your grammer. With stories, poems or even song lyrics you need to know the basics of grammer and how to use it. [i]"you told me you would never let go" This sentence needs a capital and a commer after the end because the next line starts with "but". You need to remember to put in capital letters, full stops and commers, even in poetry.
Apart from the grammer the poem is reall good and really touching. It has a powerful meaning and will steal the hearts of many. Keep writing because after all, writers are made, not born.
l just love it my friend its just allsome how did you write it it brings love lolzzyou should right some more up and post them up couse they sound qwite goood listen to your heart and write more jokes listen to your best friend saying write more write more write more now now now now now ******************************panda21***************************************
I couoldn't understand your poem very well. It took reading it five times and looking at Abid's comment to understand it. It's too short. I didn't get enough time to capture the essence of it. The poem didn't convey the message clearly. Maybe you could write a few more stanzas for your "Nanny". That way people would 'get it' a lot easier.
I Like The Gesture That It Was For Your Gran, Which Is Beautiful cause I Got One Myself and
I Wanna Write a Poem About Her
But I Honestly Think that This was too short, I Think What U Wrote Qualifies For one average stanza and i think you should write more, it would help the idea that your trying to convey