Hello Logan15! Welcome to YSW - appears you haven't been here awhile! I'm just getting back here myself and happened upon this little ditty to review.
For starters, let's take the word "normal" and toss it into a garbage disposal to be disintegrated into pulp. With the billions of people on this planet, I am a firm believer that there is no "normal." Those who classify things within that category are boring, judgmental, and/or prefer to live in a world of false reality. Each person brings an individualism and uniqueness that does not match any other person - we are each our own beautiful creations.
Now let's get to the review!
First off, I love the repetition of "very," "all the right to," "it hurts because," "I love it," "really," "I know I'm not," "no one excluded," "I don't care," "it doesn't matter" all emphasize meaning. Repetitive lines really can showcase emotion, intent, and meaning. These do this very well!
Second, you are absolutely correct. No one is but everyone is. We each only understand "normal" from our perspectives, how we see the world, and those in it. EVERYONE deserves respect and to be treated like human beings worthy of love and care.
Third, whoever said that there is a specific definition of normal may have had that truth to them, but one person's truth does not ever personify EVERYONE's truth.
Fourth, the line
made me giggle. It gave this already personable and relatable poem an even bigger personality!I have an unhealthy obsession / With corn dogs / And dice,
Fifth, I suggest changing the "themself" to "themselves" to make that line sound accurate. It seems the tenses do not match up and is worded strange when read aloud.
Lastly, I love this entirety and what you have brought out within it. Kudos to you for writing a piece that reminded me to question the status quo and where we find "normal."
Wishing you well wherever you are in the world,
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wIth <3 ~A
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