Hi Liverwurst, Felistia here with a review for you on this wonderful day.
Theme: I absolutely love that you chose such a simple concept (the one of a flames life from start to finish.) and turned it into something so beautiful and interesting to read. It proves that even the simplest of things can be used to create a wonderful poem.
Description: Your description was wonderful in this poem. You used metaphors, similes and lots of colour which really made the poem come alive in my mind. I could picture everything in crystal clear colour. You also provided a lot of beautiful emotions. I never thought of how a flame feels about its short life, but you provided a lovely story filled with lots of emotion and description. Well done.
Grammar and Punctuation: Okay I am not an expert at this and I am just going to recommend asking for a review on this from @Rascalover or @Meerkat. They know a lot more about poetry punctuation then me and will probably be more helpful.
Small suggestions: My only suggestion is to keep writing poetry like this because I really enjoyed it.
Overall I really loved this poem and look forward to your next piece. Never stop writing and I hope you have a great day\night.
Your friend, Felistia.
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