👱🏻♀️ The Feather 👱🏻♀️
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No matter where it hides,
No matter where it goes,
My little buzzing honey Bee,
Will always bring the feather home.
This little black-and-white feather,
That my baby Bee found,
It always ends up with her,
Curled up on the ground.
It never comes inside,
So nature can take it away,
But always just by luck,
Does it find my little babe.
My fluffy little pup,
Sitting at the door,
Waiting to go outside,
So she can find the feather once more.
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This is a very cute poem! I enjoy the use of slant rhymes( I hope that's what they are called). I find this a very chill poem and down to earth which I enjoy reading even though I cannot write them for the life of me. The only Itty bitty critique is that the last line feels like it breaks up the rhythm that was there, which honestly does make sense ad it is the last line, but that is the only possible thing I feel to critique.
Thanks!!! I dunno if they’re called slant rhymes, and also yep. That last line needs to be fixed lol